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The spirit still burns through me...; Naming the Custom Championship...
Topic Started: Feb 22 2008, 12:58 AM (256 Views)
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Fade.

Pride. Glory. Honor. Triumph. These are all the feelings of a new champion. What the fuck is wrong with Phenetic? Bastard just won the title and still something feels empty from him. Hmm, well his wife, the only girl who gave a shit about him, is dead. He had to give up his son. And worst of all, he missed the latest episode of Desperate Housewives. Well maybe not the last one, but still, life is pretty shitty. Spending Valentines Day alone, seeing all the couples holding hands, exchanging small, yet passionate kisses. We see Phenetic slump into his locker room, tired as fuck form the forty-five minute battle he had with Colossus at a recent house show. Custom Championship draped over his shoulder, he walks in and drops the title on a small table near the couch. After dropping the title, he slowly stumbles a few inches over, and drops down upon the couch. He tries to sleep, yet still cant. While he wishes the insomnia is from excitement, unfortunately this is not the case this time. Phenetic rushes his hands through his hair and face, talking to himself, stressed out, trying to figure out if this moment is real.

Phenetic: Fuck is real? Is this true? Am I really champion? I mean come on, the company couldn’t find someone BETTR than me to put the title on?

Phenetic slowly sits up and looks over to a picture of Natalie and Steve. He picks up the picture and slumps back on the couch staring into Natalie and Steve’s eyes. His eyes water up, but he fights the tears.

Phenetic: I wish you two were here to see this. I’d give anything to have you guys here.

Suddenly a familiar voice is heard, one that surprises Phenetic.

???: Well half of your wish was granted.

Phenetic looks up and sees Colossus standing there with…Steve! Phenetic’s eyes water up even more as he is overjoyed to see his son who he was missed for a couple months.

Colossus: I can’t exactly give you Natalie, but I pulled some strings and flew Steve out here to see his dad.

Phenetic sits on his knees upon the floor and holds him arms out. Steve begins to flow tears from his eyes and drops his bag to the floor. He rushes over to Phenetic and hugs him as tight as he can. While hugging his son, Phenetic looks up at Colossus and smiles.

Phenetic: Thank you, thank you so much.

Colossus grins as he nods his head. Steve takes his gear off and begins to admire his dad’s new title.

Colossus: No problem man, of course you do owe me $1,100 for the plane ticket.

Both men chuckle for a few moments before taking a sigh.

Colossus: Nah but seriously you owe for the ticket.

Phenetic: You serious?

Colossus: No you dumbass!

Phenetic chuckles again as he pats Steve on the head, he motions for Colossus to come sit so he can quickly talk business. The two men slowly sit along side Phenetic’s kitchen table as Phenetic slides Colossus a glass and offers him water or some Pepsi. Colossus takes the latter. Phenetic rushes his hands through his hair, still wondering how the fuck Colossus changed and showered so quick.

Phenetic: Yea how did you?

Colossus stares at Phenetic with a confused gaze.

Colossus: Excuse me? How did I what?

Phenetic: Oh, sorry. How did you change and shower so fast?

Colossus: There are public showers ya know?

Phenetic: Ew.

Colossus chuckles as he takes a sip of his glass and sets it down. He wipes his hands and folds them on the table.

Colossus: So, what are you gonna name the title?

Phenetic: I’ll name it later tonight. I got a segment time form Dolly so I can name it.

Colossus: Can’t give me some spoilers?

Phenetic: Nah, but I think you’ll like the name.

Colossus imitates Joey Styles horribly as he jokingly holds a fake microphone to Phenetic. He laughs along with Colossus and plays along.

Colossus: So Nexus is gone, and you’re the new Custom Champ, how does it feel?

Phenetic: Pretty damn good.

Colossus: What are you going to do now champ?

Phenetic: Go to McDonalds.

Colossus chuckles at the pretty obvious dull humor. Both men let out a huge sigh, bringing back old and good memories.

Colossus: Seriously, how does it feel?

Phenetic: The title felt pretty good I guess, but when I saw Nexus leave the arena, it hit me inside. I want to end more careers. It gave me that feeling of ecstasy inside my body. You know what’s weird?

Colossus: What’s that?

Phenetic leans in closer, hands folded together and gives him a stern, yet concerned look.

Phenetic: I’ve been thinking.

Colossus: Oh boy.

Phenetic: No hear me out. I’ve been thinking. I was walking down the street the other day, just as a normal person. I took a seat at this park, and I came across this elderly man who took a seat next too me. We chatted for a while, and he told me what he did, he said he was a janitor. I chuckled as I said I envy that he can do that, that I could never clean after people’s messes for such little money. You know what he said too me?

Colossus is now intrigued as he shakes his head.

Colossus: What?

Phenetic: He told me that if he doesn’t do it, then no body will. He told me that even though he doesn’t make a lot of money, he doesn’t need a lot of money to be happy. He told me that a house is of no use to him, that he doesn’t need a luxury car as the one he has gets him from A to B which is all that matters to him. Without even asking me what I did, or even recognizing me, he looked at me and knew I made real good money. He told me that with a great money, comes great greed. People who act as friends to me, who act caring, will only stab you in the back, as they will always look to take your spot. He also told me that a lot of money brings pain, depression, and discomfort. He looked at me and told me to never let it corrupt me, as it will destroy me. I didn’t have the heart to tell him what I’ve been through.

Colossus: Doesn’t matter, you can still follow by what he says and don’t let your past become your present and future. Don’t let your mistakes become your permanent decision, learn form them, and you will adapt from them.

Phenetic: You’re a wise man beyond your years.

Both men chuckle as Phenetic shakes hands with Colossus. Phenetic enters the bathroom and gets his stuff ready. As he comes out of the bathroom, he’s dressed up in his normal American Eagle clothes and sits down on the couch. He motions for Steve to go on and sit next to him. Steve looks at his father with a deeply concerned look.

Phenetic: Listen, I know you want to come back with me. I’m sorry, but I just…I just can’t.

Steve: You don’t me back do you?

Phenetic: Oh god yes! Of course I want you back, it’s just my job has taken up so much of my time.

Phenetic’s watch alarm goes off, he looks at it and immediately jumps out of the couch.

Phenetic: But listen, we will talk about this when I get back from the ring ok?

Phenetic slowly gets up and makes his way to the door, but as Steve speaks, he stops and looks behind him.

Steve: Ok. Oh yea! Katie also says hi too!

Phenetic: Who’s Katie? Your girlfriend?

Steve: Ew no! My older sister.

Phenetic’s heart sinks, what the fuck did he just say?

Phenetic: I’m sorry what? Your older sister?

Steve: Yea of course, mommy didn’t tell you when she was alive?

Phenetic: N…no…I guess not. We’ll talk about this when I get back.

Steve: Ok.

Phenetic closes the door as the scene fades.

The scene fades back in as we see the sold out arena. No Apologies – Eminem BLARES throughout the speakers. Phenetic make hsi way out to a roaring applause as he is cheered as a BQWA warrior. Phenetic poses at the stage, newly won Custom Championship over his shoulder, as gold pyro EXPLODES off the stage. He slowly makes his way down the ramp, shaking hands of the fans. He rolls into the ring and motions for a microphone which he takes from Tony Gellar. He signals for the crowd to quiet down as he begins to speak.


Phenetic: Thank you, thank you. I deeply appreciate it. I was proud to fight for the BQWA, the company that put me into mainstream. Now however, all I have been asked these past couple days was the same question: What are you naming the title? What will you call it? That will come in due time. I want to give you my reasoning. I decided to name this title in respect for this certain “company.” This company broke me out into the industry, and if weren’t for them, I’d be in jail, or dead. I would NEVER have been in front of all you screaming fans.

The crowd bursts into a huge pop as Phenetic smirks.

Phenetic: That’s right, I am hear by naming this title…

Phenetic pauses for a second, to build the drama and suspense.

Phenetic: THE FUSION CHAMPIONSHIP!!!

The bigger half of the crowd bursts into huge pops as a large “Fusion” chant is broken out. Yet there is still a portion booing as they see it as betrayal to BQWA.

Phenetic: This company’s spirit STILL lives through my blood, sweat, and tears. When I go out and beat the shit out of Nexus, I sweat for Fusion’s memory. When I bleed from getting barbed wire chopped across my chest by Colossus, I bleed the blood of Fusion. Every tear that drops from my eyes, is the tears of Fusion’s short history. Some people tell me to let it die, but I will always let this company’s spirit burn through my soul. Yes I fight for BQWA, but most importantly, I will ALWAYS fight for the honor, dignity, pride, and glory of Fusion!

Phenetic drops the mic as he rolls out of the ring. No Apologies – Eminem hits the speakers as Phenetic backs up the ramp, holding up his new Custom Championship, or well Fusion Championship.

Fade.


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Don't worry about the whole older sister thing, I will pick up that in my next RP hopefully. So there ya go, hope I make ya proud Biggie, Expo, and Karisma
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Dude... that's probably the first promo I've read of yours fully, but I REALLY like your style.

The conversation feels natural, t held my attention very well... even the soap opera bits are fairly well done. I HATE Steve.. but only because I picture Dominic Mysterio. Or Hornswoggle... yeah, Dominic Mysterio.


LETS GO PHENETIC *clap clap clapclapclap*

Err... yeah. Is it technically possible to go into a Ressurection Rumble wanting everyone to win?! I GOTTA STOP READING ROLEPLAYS.
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Killed Phenetic & Probably Andy Chills
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it's actually not a bad idea because no matter the winner you will be happy with the result.
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Ok so I just left a bunch of feed, so I expect the same :) Thanks for your feed though DM :martini:
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You didn't read mine! :(

Anyway, good rp. The writing was decent, good descriptions and dialogue. I liked the involvement of Colossus to sort of 'save the day'. Good to further the on/off friendship you two have.

I think the sudden mention of a unknown relative was a bit no-sold here. I know you said you'll expand later but it kinda seemed just like a passing remark, which is a bit wierd.
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DM/SS said it best, your style is unmatched I feel. It's not that different when you read an RP from you, but it's when you go back and re-read your work that you see it.

You actually only had like 2 1/2 actual paragraphs of description, but it's not very noticeable because of it's placement and the fact that your dialogue is always top shelf.

Great work man, keep it rolling.
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