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Women Of Chaos
Topic Started: Sep 20 2009, 04:02 PM (131 Views)
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The scene faded in from black to Alissa sitting in a black limousine with huge black sunglasses on her face and a leather jacket with a black dress under it. Katie Lea sat beside her in the limousine wearing some exotic eye face paint and a cream corset like top with black leather tights. They both looked ahead to the back of the drivers head and waited eagerly. Alissa checked her watch and the Warfare show would be airing in five hours. They sat in the limousine waiting for the driver to pull up at the radio station car park as she looked out at the view of the hot and sunny day of New York City:

Katie Lea: Sad about Luna, do you not think?.

Alissa looked straight at Katie Lea with a sad face and then looked down at the black leather chairs. She rubbed her head with her hand and then proceeded to speak:

Alissa: There is nothing sad about it, I owned her contract and she really wasn’t doing anything so I made the best choice I could possibly make. Release her.

Katie Lea nodded her head in agreement and she played with her dark hair. She smiled and looked ahead before pointing towards the front of the limousine:

Katie Lea: Finally, we are here.

Both girls looked towards the huge building and both smiled at the corresponding times. The limousine pulled to a slow halt and both girls dressed in dark gothic colours clambered out of the low down car and fixed themselves before walking into the building where a man at the reception patiently waited for them to walk over:

Katie Lea: We are here for the radio interview. EBWF divas? Alissa Flash and Katie Lea?

The man at the reception looked at the computer screen and then flicked through some spare papers which were lying on the wooden desk. He then looked back up at both women and smiled before proceeding to speak:

Receptionist: Yes, you are on in ten minutes, now if you just make your way to the top floor, take a left and then two on your right there is a room. Just head in and sit down and the radio announcer shall be in as soon as.

Alissa: Thank you very much.

Alissa smirked and then wandered away to the elevator that opened its rather large metal doors and made a ping noise which startled both women. Both stepped into the elevator which was full of mirrors. Alissa stood with her arms crossed and looked into the mirror at her slightly blissful face. Katie looked at all four mirrors on each wall and took the opportunity to start doing her makeup. She pulled out a very small makeup brush which looked very much like a miniature paint brush. She started touching up her cheeks:

Alissa: You do know that they can’t see you on the radio, right?

Katie stopped plastering her makeup on at once and turned around to face Alissa only a foot or so away. She sighed and then put all her makeup kit away at once:

Katie: Yes Alissa, I do know that, but I can’t go in looking like a tramp.

Alissa: You mean like Melina.

Katie Lea started laughing before putting her hand up to her mouth to stop talking and then pointed straight at Alissa and started shaking her finger:

Katie Lea: You are precisely right. Just like Melina.

The elevator doors pinged and then opened a few seconds later to show a huge grey corridor and lots of voices being heard through the doors. The two walked out and then followed the receptionist’s instructions and took a left and then went two onto their right. They proceeded to open the door and both stepped in quietly like mice. They then sat in two huge leather chairs and put on the headphones as Elvis Duran walked into the room with a huge grin on his face. He walked over to both ladies and shook both of the ladies hands and kissed them both on the cheek and mouthed some words to them which both didn’t make out very well. He then ran over to the other side of the desk and put his headset on and announced the show:

Elvis Duran: Hi guys, its Elvis Duran here and I am here with two very special guests at this time. They are both very lovely and exotic ladies. They are EBWF divas, Alissa Flash & Katie Lea.

Both Alissa and Katie lea leaned forward at the same time to speak into the microphone which sat in front of both of them:

Alissa: Thank you.

Katie Lea: It is great to be here.

Elvis Duran: Well it is a pleasure to be sitting with two very strong and athletic women. So ladies, you seem to be very much enjoying working in EBWF. I watch it whenever I get a chance to, and can I just say I love it. Now I hear both of you ladies are in a divas tag team championship tournament for new diva titles.

Alissa: That is correct. We can’t wait to step back into the ring for the gold.

Elvis Duran: Well I shall be watching and I hope you ladies put on one hell of a show.

Katie: Oh don’t worry, we shall be putting on a show.

Elvis Duran: Great, I look forward to seeing both of you in the ring against....

Elvis looked through a pile of papers that was sitting in front of him and rapidly flicked through them licking his thumb to separate and go through each page:

Katie: Don’t worry Elvis, you don’t need to check the papers because the two girls we are facing are two nobodies.

Elvis immediately stopped looking through the papers and nervously smiled at both women. He pressed the headset hard against his head so that he could hear well:

Elvis: Yes well ladies, I seen Daizee Haze in the ring this past week and let me tell you, I thought she was rather good.

Alissa and Katie Lea looked at each other in anger before sitting back in the leather seat and both started to ignore Elvis, Alissa started rolling her eyes and looking about the room while Katie started looking at her fingernails. Elvis gazed at both ladies in confusion:

Elvis: Ladies, Ladies do you have anything to say about that?

Alissa sharply looked at Katie Lea and both ladies stayed silent while Elvis tried to make them speak. Alissa stuck her hand up to Elvis’s face and then seconds later took it away:

Katie Lea: I think what she is trying to say is that we are leaving now.

Elvis: Leaving, why are you leaving?

Alissa: Whatever Elvis.

Both ladies stood up and fixed themselves before taking off their headsets and slamming them down onto the table in front of them. Both ladies turned straight away as if Elvis didn’t exist and walked out the room slamming the door on the way out. They both started walking back down the corridor before they started laughing:

Katie Lea: What a rude man.

Alissa: Yes, very much so.

Both got into the elevator and left the building straight away and back to both girls’ hotels where they relaxed for a while before they had to go to the Blue Cross Arena for their match.

---6 hours later---

Katie and Alissa both stepped foot into the arena and heard the roar of the crowd in the heart of the arena. They both trailed their huge suitcases behind them and went straight into their locker room. Five or so minutes later, Todd Grisham appeared outside the locker room they had both set foot in and waited anxiously for them biting his finger nails. Suddenly the door to the divas locker room swung open and Todd Grisham stood up straight and made a signal to the camera man to turn it on and begin recording for the moment:

Todd Grisham: Good evening, ladies and gentleman I am your interviewer standing by with Alissa Flash and Katie....

Alissa and Katie stood in front of Todd but not exactly normal. Alissa had a blonde wig on and in an attire that looked similar to what Daizee Haze would wear to a match. She began jumping around in front of the camera. Katie lea stood next to her in a long brown haired wig and in a very similar attire that Mickie James had wore in WWE. Todd Grisham’s jaw seemed to magically drop to the floor:

Alissa: I’m not Alissa Flash, I’m Daizee Haze and as you can see I’m high.

Alissa dressed as Daizee kept jumping around and shaking madly like she had taken an overdose on something. Katie on the other hand blew a kiss to the camera and then proceeded to do a Mickie James taunt where she lifted two fingers into the air and grinned, showing her clear, white teeth. Katie then moved her mouth a weird way and started speaking like the way of a hillbilly:

Katie Lea: I’m Mickie James and a live on the farm and I came to EBWF because I want money. Yee haaawww.

Katie then stuck a huge bit of wheat in the side of her mouth and began chewing on it rapidly. Alissa dressed as Daizee started looking confused into the camera and swinging her arms all over the place. She then spoke in a low slow voice:

Alissa: Where am I? I remember sniffing some magic marshmallow puffy whatever you want to call it and now I’m here. It’s just like...whoa.

Todd Grisham still stood in shock with his mouth wide open. Katie Lea then looked at him and then rammed a huge piece of wheat into his mouth to which he spat out very quickly and furiously:

Katie Lea: Momma always said, to be a big girl you chew your wheat.

Alissa: Wheat. Can I have some?

Katie Lea: Well sure you can. Down at the farm we grow all sorts of wheat.

Alissa: Radical dude.

Todd Grisham: Are you serious? You two have lost it.

Alissa: Whatever Toad. Toad, I seen one of them down at the magic marshmallow world.

Todd Grisham began shaking his head and then placed the microphone to both of the bizarre ladies:

Katie: Yee hawww. We got to win me a match and then milk the cow. Yee hawww.

Alissa then began to stop bouncing around and then tore of the wig with a serious look on her face and then Katie took the piece of wheat out her mouth and flicked it towards Todd:

Alissa: God Daizee, stepping in to your world for two minutes is hell and I sure damn wouldn’t want to be you for one your mashed up mind would end up exploding and two, tonight me and Katie Lea are going to beat you and Mickie so bad that you both will need crutches to be able to walk out of that ring tonight.

Katie then took of her wig and Mickie James attire which under it showed her real attire she would be wearing for the evening. Alissa then ripped off the Daizee Haze clothing and threw it on the ground violently, before both of them wiped their feet on the clothes they were wearing. Katie then put her mouth back her natural way, rolled her shoulders and then looked back at the bunch of clothes lying on the floor:

Katie: What a colour clash!

Alissa: You said it. Let’s go.

Both girls walked out of the camera view and could be heard talking and laughing to each other probably about the upcoming match. Todd Grisham looked at the bundle of clothes also before walking around them and also out of the camera view. The camera then just kept a view of the clothes lying all over the floor like a colourful and messy puddle before the scene faded out to black.

(OOC: Did try and do something new this time instead of being in a hotel room. Thank you to Jon for letting me use Katie Lea. Good luck to Joe and the owner of Daizee)
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Loved the RP, good luck to you and Jon :)
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Thanks Joe.
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Jack as you requested here is some feedback on your RP, my thoughts as I read it.

I love the description in the beginning. Though I'm a little confused about why the ladies are in New York City 5 hours before show time, as Warfare is in Rochester and Rochester is nearly 6 hours northwest of New York City.

There's some comma problems. Though I admit my comma use isn't perfect. Might have been minimized with a proof read though.

Main Strength: Overall, it was a very creative idea, and very well played. I might have tried to play Katie a little tighter, she's a *bit* more English than you made her out to be usually. What you have here is great. The exposition is good. I feel like I'm in the moment, and can see the scenes very clearly in my head which is a great improvement.

Areas for Improvement: Continuity issues. (See: Comment about New York) Punctuation (See: Comment about commas) The RP seemed to lack an ending, what could have made it even better is if Katie and Alissa had suddenly stopped mocking, and fell into their own voices, doing an in depth promo about why they just did what they did. (Showed how gimmicking and ridiculous Daizee and Mickie really are). I thought this piece could have used a more solid ending.

Thanks for asking for my opinion. I hope you find something useful.

Edited by Ashlee, Sep 20 2009, 04:38 PM.
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Thanks Ashlee, this will help me in future RP's a lot.
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