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Topic Started: Jul 14 2009, 05:26 PM (1,397 Views)
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AN: This is a little season final story, there are two parts (three if you like it). Thanks Dee for the title. :)


“ Yeah friends,” you say as she lifts the scalpel, as she rests the blade against your belly and begins to cut. You don’t feel it, the pain, there is no pain, not the physical screaming pain which you imagined child birth would feel like. No there is no pain, not that kind of pain, just the aching in your heart, the pain of knowing what is about to come. “Be quick,” you whisper still wanting to protect your baby. “You need to get him out quickly and keep him warm.”

“I know,” The woman who is holding you captive says. “I read it on the internet, I know what to do.”

You want to roll your eyes, scream at her that she doesn’t know what she’s doing, that you can’t learn how to deliver a baby over the internet but you can’t, your head starts to spin, you’re loosing blood and eyes drift shut.

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The screaming baby, it is your baby’s cries which wake you. “Can I see him?” you ask the question but you already know the answer, the woman glares at you and holds the baby protectively against her chest.

“No, it’s not your baby.” She stands up and begins pacing in small circles.

“Please,” You beg, but it’s not going to change anything. You can’t win. “Call an ambulance.” It is a last ditch attempt to save yourself because you don’t want to die, you’re not ready to die. “Please.”

“No,” She holds the baby tighter against her and she begins to pick up her bag.

“Katie please, I don’t want to die.”

She stops moving and looks at you, she stares down at you and then reaches for the phone. For the briefest of moments you think she is going to do it but then she drops it on the floor. “It was nice knowing you Violet.” She says and she walks away.

The front door slams and you feel the floor vibrate beneath you, the first sign that these drugs are wearing off, that you’re getting feeling back, but you still can’t move, you still don’t feel the pain, just weakness. You let out a cry and turn your head, laying on the floor just inches away from you is the phone. You stare at it, begin willing it to move, willing your body to move. If you’re to survive you need to reach it.

“Come on,” you cry out in frustration after nothing moves. “Concentrate Violet.” You let out a breath as slow as you possibly can; an attempt to get control of your body and you try again.

This time you move your fingers, a dull tapping noise fills your ears, progress but it is not enough. Some finger tapping isn’t going to save you. You try again and then you feel it, pain. Never in your life have you been so grateful to feel pain; it grips your body with a force which in any other situation would be paralyzing. It doesn’t paralyze you though it gives you the strength you need.

With one arm you reach out for the phone, your fingers wrap around it and you push a button, any button because you don’t have the strength to dial. You listen to bleeping of the numbers and wait for the line to connect.

“Hey Violet,” Pete’s voice greets down the line and a sense of relief runs through you.

“Help me.” You cry, “Please help me.”

“Violet?” You can hear the concern in his voice. “Violet?”

“Help me,” You say one more time, the words this time barely louder than a whisper and then you loose consciousness.
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Totally loved this, and I'm not even close to likin' the character of Violet. Totally thinking it could go down like this. Man, I wanna know what else you have cause yeah...that poor baby!
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WOW! I am speechless over here. Amazing writing. I NEED to know if Violet will be okay. What will happen to the baby? Can you tell I got a bit caught up in the story? lol
Great job!
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Jul 14 2009, 05:47 PM
Totally loved this, and I'm not even close to likin' the character of Violet. Totally thinking it could go down like this. Man, I wanna know what else you have cause yeah...that poor baby!
Thanks Lulu for someone who doesn't like Violet I'm glad you liked it. I'm not sure if it is going to go down like this, but I hope Violet doesn't die. I should have some more up soon. :wub:
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Jul 14 2009, 10:46 PM
WOW! I am speechless over here. Amazing writing. I NEED to know if Violet will be okay. What will happen to the baby? Can you tell I got a bit caught up in the story? lol
Great job!
Thanks so much Kathy :D You won't have to wait too long to find out the fate of Violet, but the baby...well that might take a little longer. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I'll have some more soon.
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I feel as though I am repeating myself after reading Kathy and Lulu's comments. They both said it so well. Your writing talent really shines through in this. I'm not entirely a fan of second person but you made it work in this! It iis probably the only way this could work and still come across as powerfully as it did. I too am looking forward to reading more!
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I feel as though I am repeating myself after reading Kathy and Lulu's comments. They both said it so well. Your writing talent really shines through in this. I'm not entirely a fan of second person but you made it work in this! It iis probably the only way this could work and still come across as powerfully as it did. I too am looking forward to reading more!
I'm so pleased you said that, :kissy I haven't done too much of the second person writing and it isn't something I feel completely comfortable with but when the idea of writing something for PP came about this was the first thing that crossed my mind. I'm glad you think I've pulled it off. Thanks.
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Wow-i'm-speechless-and-I'm-really-not-a-Private-Practice-fan.

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Jul 15 2009, 10:18 AM
Wow-i'm-speechless-and-I'm-really-not-a-Private-Practice-fan.

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Thanks :D there is more nowish.
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AN: Here is part two because it is written and I am terrible at sitting on things. Part three might take a bit longer it isn't written yet.




“When is she going to wake up? It’s been two days. You said she’d be awake by now.” The sound of Cooper’s voice seems to break into your head. “Is she going to wake up? You said she’d wake up.” He sounds frantic and worried.

“She’s going to wake up.” Pete’s voice, it is calm and level. “She just needs more time.” And then you feel a hand rub against the side of your face.

“He’s right Coop,” The unmistakable drawl of Charlotte King. “She just needs more time.”

“How much more time?”

“I don’t know Coop, I don’t know.” There is sadness to her voice a shake and then you hear a shuffling of feet and a hand brush against yours. “She’s going to wake up Coop.”

“You don’t know that.” It is Cooper’s voice again, much closer this time. You feel him lift your hand and begin gently rubbing it. “I’m sorry I wasn’t there, I should have been there.” He starts to whisper.

“It’s not your fault Cooper.” Pete’s voice soothes. “She’s going to wake up.” You feel him rub his finger along your cheek bone again and you let out a moan.

That moan is all it takes for the energy in the room to change. You hear more feet move towards you and for the first time they speak to you. “Violet can you hear me?” It is Pete’s voice and there is just the hint of excitement to his calm tone. “Can you open your eyes, wake up?”

You let out another moan, unable yet to form a word and you try to open your eyes. You blink a few times and wait for everything to come into focus. The first thing you see is Pete, and then Cooper, they are standing on either side of you, and the relief is evident on their faces.

“That’s it Violet.”

“You’re doing well.”

They both say, as you start to move your tongue around it your mouth, as you start to try and speak, there is only one thing you care about. “Grasshopper.” You say, “Did you find him?”

There is a pause and they both look away from you for a moment, just long enough for you to realize the answer.

“They’re still looking.” Pete says with a sad tone to his voice. “Everyone is looking, they’ve had Katie’s photo on the news, at every air port, bus station, they’re looking, they’re going to find them.”

“Okay,” You say the word but you can’t hide the sadness from your voice, the devastation. You didn’t think you would ever see your baby but you didn’t think you’d ever survive either, and the realization that you have and he is gone, it is a feeling you can’t quite comprehend. You feel tears start to well up in your eyes, and all you want to do it curl up into a ball and sob. You want to cry out, melt away into nothing. The men on either side of you see your pain, they both want to help you but you look to Pete, it is his loss too, he can’t know what you are feeling but he has his own pain. He reaches down and pulls you into his arms. He holds you as tight as he can and you begin crying uncontrollably. He whispers something to you, you can’t understand him, and it doesn’t matter, nothing he says is going to make you feel better. Your baby is gone and he can’t change that.

You cry until you reach the point of exhaustion, until you start to drift back to sleep. You’re almost ready to lay down again when the door to your room opens. You lift your head and look towards the doorway. Sheldon is standing there, his cheeks look red, flushed like he’s been running. He sees you sitting up and smiles.

“Violet you’re awake.” He says running over and giving you a hug, he holds you in his arms for a moment and then steps back. You notice the look on his face he’s smiling.

“Sheldon, what’s going on?” The question comes from Pete.

Sheldon looks at all of you and takes a deep breath. “The LAPD just phoned, they think they’ve found them. “
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So there will be a part three? I can't wait! :)

This was great Marie. I love how she didn't magically get better. She wouldn't. That is one thing I love about your stories. You research medical stuff and it shows. Sometimes it varies from what might occur in the states but mostly it is flawless. Brilliant job! please get part three to us soon!
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I love it! It is so emotion filled. That chapter really pulled at my heartstrings. Pete and Coop are wonderful. Their desire to comfort her really comes across in your writing. Can't wait for more!
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Jul 15 2009, 08:46 PM
So there will be a part three? I can't wait! :)

This was great Marie. I love how she didn't magically get better. She wouldn't. That is one thing I love about your stories. You research medical stuff and it shows. Sometimes it varies from what might occur in the states but mostly it is flawless. Brilliant job! please get part three to us soon!
Yes there will be a part three. :) I haven't written it yet but I have an idea for it. It crossed me mind of write something from Pete's POV but I threw that idea out and worked out a better way to keep it all with Violet.

I'm really glad you liked it. I enjoy reading about the medical stuff so I find the research fun and I like to give my stories some semblance of realism. It is nice to hear that is noticed. :kissy

I'll get part three as soon as I can.
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Jul 15 2009, 11:11 PM
I love it! It is so emotion filled. That chapter really pulled at my heartstrings. Pete and Coop are wonderful. Their desire to comfort her really comes across in your writing. Can't wait for more!
Aww...Thanks so much Kathy, I love the friendship Cooper has with Violet and I'm coming around to the idea of her and Pete. I think they really do care about her I'm pleased that came across. :kissy
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Leaving you some love. :blowkiss:
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