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Blaze	17 Jul 2008, 09:22 PM
Health: 600/600 Posts: 1,572 Group: Admin Member #8 Joined: 6 January 2008	The dialogue moves a little too quickly. Here's an example of how you could improve it: “What’s this,” I asked, puzzled. “War hammer.” She replied, like it was obvious a ninja would be carrying around a War hammer. “But...why do you have such a weapon in your arsenal?", I continued. She simply blinked at me, leaving me in no doubt as to my intelligence in her eyes. Sighing, I surrendered. "Never mind. How are you carrying such an item?" Obviously beginning to get annoyed at my stupidity, she glared at me and replied, "“I am ninja.” I must begin writing my own short story. Must think of topic! Also, very nice idea. However, I don't believe this is an accurate representation of the idea of balance between light and dark. Or maybe I've read WAY to much Sin War. All this "Cult of Rathma" ideology getting in my head >.< I need to stop talking about Diablo on these forums too. Edited by Blaze, 17 Jul 2008, 09:32 PM.
	"One day we'll get married. What do you think of that? My best man will be Harry. Your bridesmaid will be your cat!" -Ron Puppet

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