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| Make up your Mind!; Open for plot hints :) | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: 17 Nov 2009, 11:24 PM (375 Views) | |
| cheesebug | 17 Nov 2009, 11:24 PM Post #1 |
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Okay, so I'm writing a story, and it's pretty bad so far. There are two parts, but I'm still on part one, and I've been working on it for almost 6 months! I have a mish-moshy plot, but I'm TOTALLY up for some ideas of what to do with characters, and the story. Plz Hlp? Cheesy |
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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| Deleted User | 18 Nov 2009, 04:16 AM Post #2 |
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well -the disease she has were you thinking multiple personality disorder? *i like how the doctor said emu instead of emo-thats so funny* after reading the whole thing i dont feel like thinking about ideas just now-but hopefully i will think up some suggestions for you.... |
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| Concolor | 18 Nov 2009, 06:28 AM Post #3 |
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I think she seems exactly like a normal teenager But that's why I like the story.
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Life is beautiful, love heals, people come through. Reason, compassion and love comes first. Everything else is secondary. Except for Skittles. - And emperor Cheezy!
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18 Nov 2009, 07:11 PM Post #4 |
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DELICIOUS!
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Alright well I'm going to just say what I think as I read. Like usual when people ask for advice. From what I've seen it's somewhat out of chronological order. Or it could just be, thats how she sees things. And this girl, Alice, would be a great actor from the sound of it. And how old is she, if her friends are drinking tequila? And she's still in school? Remember, this is constructive criticism. Don't want a repeat of last time.And, I can see a somewhat central antagonist, mainly Alice and her mental disorder, but so far I've seen 3 of her. It's very interesting, to say the least. You just don't really know where to go from there? Edited by Luemas, 18 Nov 2009, 07:12 PM.
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I think I'm Crazzzy. I think your crazy. I think your crazzzy... probably. | |
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| cheesebug | 18 Nov 2009, 08:26 PM Post #5 |
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thats so funny, in part two she gets into acting ![]() yeah, she gets pregnant, doesnt know what to do. dont know what to do with her after that. |
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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19 Nov 2009, 05:58 PM Post #6 |
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And how old is she? Well... The young and the restless... Now, does she just have insane acting abilities, or even more importantly to wonder in a story with a disturbed mental patient that has MPD, is anyone else in the story real? Well, Robin probably is. I mean.. I can see his role in act 2. |
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| cheesebug | 20 Nov 2009, 07:33 PM Post #7 |
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its pretty much based on a disorder i have, except i have a personality. ![]() and in part two, robin actually abandons her. i seriously have no clue what to make her do about the baby.... |
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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20 Nov 2009, 07:54 PM Post #8 |
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How tragedy are we feeling here? I'm thinking the Two A's, just for sadness. You know, and then have her tear up and everything after she signs it, but its too late. Etc. |
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| cheesebug | 20 Nov 2009, 07:57 PM Post #9 |
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hm......awesome. lets see if i ever get around to writing it after going blank
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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| cheesebug | 24 Nov 2009, 02:08 PM Post #10 |
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ah, ive decided to quit on this. oh well i tried
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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| Concolor | 24 Nov 2009, 03:39 PM Post #11 |
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Just don't throw away your notes. You never know when inspiration is coming your way. |
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Life is beautiful, love heals, people come through. Reason, compassion and love comes first. Everything else is secondary. Except for Skittles. - And emperor Cheezy!
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| Deleted User | 24 Nov 2009, 08:17 PM Post #12 |
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quit after all that? *she could have an abortion and then move to another school cause she wants to start again-- but there is really different schooliquette she has to unravel and she does so much wrong and has to find out why stuff is happening??? *she could have the baby and play house with Robin and have trouble or genius ways to adjust to being a family *the baby could be a false alarm and she decides to drop outta school and go backpacking in Iran *she could be a single mum and turn to a life of ingenius crime scaming etc....to support them using her personalities (comedy) *she could use her different personalities in a school hostage situation and become a hero ummmm..... *she could end up having triplets who grow up start a coven and voodoo their paternal father for years of emotional abuse (horror) |
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| cheesebug | 24 Nov 2009, 10:17 PM Post #13 |
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woah! thanks, sweetiez, for the inspiration! you are awesome! i guess i'll continue working (only cuz you helped!)
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| Deleted User | 25 Nov 2009, 12:03 AM Post #14 |
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ow good hope to read some soon
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But that's why I like the story.

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Don't want a repeat of last time.

12:53 PM Jul 11