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TORI -series comments page
Topic Started: 16 Mar 2010, 03:52 PM (1,220 Views)
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heres a place to comment so it doesnt wreck the flow....
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ARZY you are so thoughtful! Thanks for doing this; what are your comments on it?
http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry
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and think: she wanted storms."
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well i am up to this part
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as usual i really enjoy your writing and its descriptivness -eg "poison ivy plants potted along the hallway" .... awesome.

despite my atrocious grammar i picked up this -
"she pulled oven a little computer & started writing" you meant "open" instead of "oven" yeah?

looking forward to reading the rest.... :thumbs:
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ah ya ill fix that....thank you ;) i wrote more (almost done) and ill post the rest soon...
http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry
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well.....this isnt a Tori comment but a comment all the same.

Nice work Cheesebug- certainly a creativety (vity? :unsure: ) EXPLOSION going on at the moment.

So i ask what is inspiring you at the moment?

is it ur spring break still ? all that sunshine ???

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No, spring break ended a long time ago. You probably noticed all my recent poems (except lady of the night) have a male character
So, theres a chick (lets call her mandy) and two boys-Lewis, who likes me and i like him but theres a lot of tension, and Isaac, whos a best friend who likes me but also likes the spotlight. Lewis and Isaac usually comfort me when things get bad, but Isaac recently started to become somewhat quiet around me. Then, I saw Mandy and him flirting, got freaked out, Lewis tried to comfort me (he didnt know why i was acting depressed) but i ignored him, even though i liked isaac less than him. That's what "explain my love" is about.
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ooooo

well very interesting Mandy Cheezey
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Grr! as if. Mandy needs to die. i will get my Revenge!
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XD
How...
threatful...?
TIMEY-WHIMEY SKITTLES!
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Long time ago. I forgot about the boy anyway.
But she's still a batch.
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Heehee,
I know exactly how you feel.
enemies never fade...
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I am a huge believer in vendetta. F**k world peace. Someone takes your buss seat pop a cap in their @$$.
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:O
OMG! So we're on the same page :thumbs:
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ay!
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haha
*sees Luemas sitting in my seat*
*Loads shotgun*
run,boy,run!
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