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The Lectures; Everyone just needs a hug!
Topic Started: 17 Apr 2010, 12:46 AM (342 Views)
cheesebug
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The Lectures

If suicide is what they crave, let them crave it
You scream into me your preachings
It is too late
Standing on the edge, looking towards my feet
But not the ground below
Everyone screams to me
Stop
No
Don't
They don't actually care
But what else are they to do
They try to give me lectures
Where did those lectures go
I ask you, I scream
Where did they go
How did they effect me
If you were to keep me from dying
You would have given me more
Than a lecture
So I stand
My eyes slowly focus on the ground
I can fly
I say
I can live
I can breath
I'll be in a better place
Flying
Living
Breathing
While in your world
I am simply on the ground
Lying
I give a gasp and jump
Spread my arms
Enough for him to grab
I am pulled back to reality
Back to sanity
And suddenly I am sobbing
Afraid now
Even though I had been so confident
Didn't give a damn
Earlier
And suddenly I am in his lap
My arms curled around him
And there is no lecture
He simply curls his arms around me
And he sobs, too.




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"You will hear thunder and remember me,
and think: she wanted storms."
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Great poem cheezy! I love the bitter-sweet ending.

Fore some reason, I really like the mood/atmosphere/sensation (Norwegian word "stemning" ;) ) in the poem when it comes to the sentence "And there is no lecture". It's like it strikes a chord somewhere inside me, and it means that you've built up something throughout the rest of the poem that is suddenly released in that phrase so that it resonates like the sound of a single piano note in a really quiet room. I like :)
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THANK YOU!!!!! You give the best reviews, i'm glad my writing can reach you ;) check out my others ;)

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"You will hear thunder and remember me,
and think: she wanted storms."
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cheesebug
17 Apr 2010, 09:30 AM
THANK YOU!!!!! You give the best reviews, i'm glad my writing can reach you ;) check out my others ;)

:'( :'( I-I'm not your favorite? I am destroyed inside! :'( :'( :'( :'( :'(
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Don't worry, I'm sure cheezy likes you reviews as well. I'm just older, and have more experience in criticizing other people's work :)
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DELICIOUS!
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The last time I tried to review...
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I think I'm Crazzzy. I think your crazy. I think your crazzzy... probably.
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Yay! I might still have a chance!
TIMEY-WHIMEY SKITTLES!
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