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| The Lectures; Everyone just needs a hug! | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: 17 Apr 2010, 12:46 AM (342 Views) | |
| cheesebug | 17 Apr 2010, 12:46 AM Post #1 |
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The Lectures If suicide is what they crave, let them crave it You scream into me your preachings It is too late Standing on the edge, looking towards my feet But not the ground below Everyone screams to me Stop No Don't They don't actually care But what else are they to do They try to give me lectures Where did those lectures go I ask you, I scream Where did they go How did they effect me If you were to keep me from dying You would have given me more Than a lecture So I stand My eyes slowly focus on the ground I can fly I say I can live I can breath I'll be in a better place Flying Living Breathing While in your world I am simply on the ground Lying I give a gasp and jump Spread my arms Enough for him to grab I am pulled back to reality Back to sanity And suddenly I am sobbing Afraid now Even though I had been so confident Didn't give a damn Earlier And suddenly I am in his lap My arms curled around him And there is no lecture He simply curls his arms around me And he sobs, too. |
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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| Concolor | 17 Apr 2010, 04:07 AM Post #2 |
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Great poem cheezy! I love the bitter-sweet ending. Fore some reason, I really like the mood/atmosphere/sensation (Norwegian word "stemning" ) in the poem when it comes to the sentence "And there is no lecture". It's like it strikes a chord somewhere inside me, and it means that you've built up something throughout the rest of the poem that is suddenly released in that phrase so that it resonates like the sound of a single piano note in a really quiet room. I like
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Life is beautiful, love heals, people come through. Reason, compassion and love comes first. Everything else is secondary. Except for Skittles. - And emperor Cheezy!
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| cheesebug | 17 Apr 2010, 09:30 AM Post #3 |
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THANK YOU!!!!! You give the best reviews, i'm glad my writing can reach you check out my others ![]() |
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http://masochistic-goddess.tumblr.com/poetry "You will hear thunder and remember me, and think: she wanted storms." | |
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| Midst Of Vampy | 25 Apr 2010, 10:53 PM Post #4 |
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Barabbas
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I-I'm not your favorite? I am destroyed inside!
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| TIMEY-WHIMEY SKITTLES! | |
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| Concolor | 26 Apr 2010, 11:37 AM Post #5 |
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Barabbas
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Don't worry, I'm sure cheezy likes you reviews as well. I'm just older, and have more experience in criticizing other people's work
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Life is beautiful, love heals, people come through. Reason, compassion and love comes first. Everything else is secondary. Except for Skittles. - And emperor Cheezy!
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26 Apr 2010, 04:00 PM Post #6 |
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DELICIOUS!
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The last time I tried to review... |
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I think I'm Crazzzy. I think your crazy. I think your crazzzy... probably. | |
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| Midst Of Vampy | 26 Apr 2010, 06:39 PM Post #7 |
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Yay! I might still have a chance! |
| TIMEY-WHIMEY SKITTLES! | |
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) in the poem when it comes to the sentence "And there is no lecture". It's like it strikes a chord somewhere inside me, and it means that you've built up something throughout the rest of the poem that is suddenly released in that phrase so that it resonates like the sound of a single piano note in a really quiet room. I like

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