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Duck and Cover, Here I come; Solo, Starter
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Topic Started: Sep 21 2017, 06:20 PM (42 Views)
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Jovia
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Sep 21 2017, 06:20 PM
Post #1
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- Posts:
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- Trainers
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- #30
- Joined:
- Sep 21, 2017
- Character Name
- Airis/Natsu
- Character Gender
- Female/Female
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Who called this place the badlands? A derisive snort could be heard coming from a somewhat tall and slender young woman. Bright red jaw length hair gently fluttered in the wind that partially hid her face. Amber eyes with a spark it seems within them glanced around with an amused glint contained. Natsu’s lips curled into a slight smirk while her delicate looking hands were placed on her hips.
“Badlands, more like a park really.. I figured it would be even tougher here than the desert.” Really if it was going to be so easy she would have rather headed into the desert to try to find a suitable pokemon. Carefully she shifted the backpack that was strapped to her back and checked to make sure everything was in place. Today only in a loose sleeved light blue shirt and tan loose pants. Her feet though were in of course fashionable hiking shoes, well as fashionable as one could make those types of things. A simple high end straw hat was the only thing that kept her hair from going too far.
Steady footsteps resounded out as the lone trainer started to head further into the badlands. Somewhat concentrated on a bottle in her hands to wipe sunscreen lotion over what part of hers was out in the open. It wouldn’t do to burn alive out here just because she wanted something different than was handed out to all those weaker willed. A sneer spread over her face as something caught Natsu’s sight.
A bit of movement, something was messing around and digging. Upon getting a tad bit closer the sneer grew into a full on smirk. It was a ground type alright, but not like a Sandshrew, no this thing had extremely long claws. Able to move great mounds of earth around and yet it dug through the ground like it was sand or water. “Good good, you will do just nicely.” At the human woman’s comment the Drilbur stopped and glanced up warily.
“Hmph no need to be wary, if I win you are mine.” With those short words Natsu had dropped the backpack onto the ground with all of her stuff tucked away inside. So on as the heavy thud resounded lithe feet pushed against the ground while the distance became shorter. The Drilbur however gave a little snort before he turned towards her and kept going. He started to spin faster and faster until he was like a spinning top before the human reached him.
Natsu gave a little snort before she launched herself up off the ground, to land on top of the Drilbur upside down like a handstand before she launched again. Drilbur gave a snort, not about to let a human touch him and get away with it. Before his spinning slowed down too far he reached out with his claws and scratched at her arm that almost got away from him.
The young woman gave a little smirk and lightly licked her lips, only a mere glance towards the somewhat light scratches that had started to bleed. “Good, good, you aren’t a stupid one either you’ll do.” Drilbur of course sneered and snorted at this arrogant little human before he started to cover himself with mud. Whether she had a pokemon she would bring out or not, at least he could try to make himself more formidable.
To Natsu though this just made her grin even more before she picked up a small rock from the ground and threw it at the ground type. It was a normal throw so the pokemon had dodged it fairly easy, but couldn’t dodge her foot that flew through the air right after it. Essentially she stepped on him before a jump got her away from the wildly flailing claws of the Drilbur as he reacted rather poorly.
“Ha, you are just a wild pokemon of course you can’t compare to the tactics of a human. Come you will be mine and we will be powerful.” Her taunt didn’t completely go over his head as a snort escaped from him. While not as quick as some pokemon he rushed towards her with claws that flailed about to try to scratch and maim her if he could. He finally hit her again! Ha! About to let a chortle out he couldn’t help but feel it catch in his throat when he felt something on his arm.
Natsu had grabbed him and then flung him to the other side into the ground. Both were now disheveled, dirty, and in Natsu’s case some blood from scratches. Drilbur gave a little huff but the young woman was all smiles. “I guess I should work on making you obedient and train elsewhere.” She reached down to her backpack and picked up a pokeball, somehow she had gotten back to her stuff she dropped earlier.
“If you get free I don’t mind thrashing you until you agree.” That broad grin over Natsu’s face was full of bliss that caused him to shiver a little bit. Usually humans just use pokemon against other pokemon or run off but this? Before he could dig into the ground the pokeball hit him then fell to the ground to wiggle and flash.
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Airis (Character pic/sprite) Profile 'Cause I'd get a thousand hugs From ten thousand lightning bugs As they tried to teach me how to dance Unspent Story EXP: 00 Breeder
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Jasmine Level: 5 EXP: 0/50 Ability: Own Tempo No. of Moves: 4
Moveset 1 - Absorb 2 - Growth 3 - 4 - - Ingrain - Sweet Scent | 
NICKNAME Level: 0 EXP: 0/0 Ability: No. of Moves: 0
Moveset 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - | 
NICKNAME Level: 0 EXP: 0/0 Ability: No. of Moves: 0
Moveset 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - | | | |
Items *Duffel Bag *Map of Honu Island *5 Pokeballs *2 Potions *Canteen *Small Tent *Blanket and Pillow *Basic camping cooking utensils
Contacts None
Natsu (Character pic/sprite) Profile Mirror, mirror on the wall Who's the baddest of them all? Welcome to my wicked world, wicked world Unspent Story EXP: 00 Trainer
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Phillipe Level: 5 EXP: 0/50 Ability: Sand Force No. of Moves: 4
Moveset 1 - Scratch 2 - Mud Sport 3 - Rapid Spin 4 - | 
NICKNAME Level: 0 EXP: 0/0 Ability: No. of Moves: 0
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NICKNAME Level: 0 EXP: 0/0 Ability: No. of Moves: 0
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Items *Backpack *Map of Honu Island *5 Pokeballs *2 Potions *Water Bottle *Small Tarp *Simple Sleeping Bag *Basic camping cooking utensils *Simple silver chain with an amber pendant(not fossil)
Contacts None
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shadowcat
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Sep 22 2017, 02:11 PM
Post #2
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Story EXP: 40 Battle EXP: 0 Other Rewards: Congratulations, you caught a:
 Level: 5 Moves: 4Comments Your first solo! Welcome to Lorelii. We are fairly lenient around here, and I hope you enjoy yourself. That being said, and since you asked, I have some critique I'd like to give you. First of all the length isn't quite what I would have hoped for a capture post. Next time, and especially if you'd like to capture some stronger and more exciting partners, the story will generally need to be longer. You can add length by adding more pockets of conflict. Here the only conflict was that the Drilbur needed to be weakened before being caught. That's fairly standard, and it's fair, but here we strive to write stories! Stories centre around conflict -- that's really the whole point of a story at all. So next time I want to see more issues presented. In every thread I want you to think about what your character's goal is -- and ideally state that within the narrative so that the reader is rooting for you from the beginning, as you have here -- then move on to what is preventing you from that goal. Here is a tip that is used in almost every story, when broken down, and in most threads you'll read here: the first time your character tries to solve the problem that keeps them from the goal, they almost always fail and often they make it worse. They then gain or realise something through hardship that allows them to complete their task! Their overarching goal is still incomplete, but at the end of each thread they are probably one step closer. Feel free to read more in this post I made!One other small thing: commas! I think your writing and clarity would benefit greatly from some reading and research on clauses and correct comma usage. I'm happy to give you examples etc. Enjoy your new partner and good luck on your journey!
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Matthew  I feel the cool water rushing over me Into the sea I close my eyes I dream of all the places that I'd rather be That's all I have now. Unspent Story EXP: 685 | Pokemon |
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Ike Level: 26 EXP: 0/260 Ability: Own Tempo No. of Moves: 8
Moveset 1 - Curse 2 - Yawn 3 - Tackle 4 - Water Pulse 5 - Confusion 6 - Ice Beam 7 - Disable 8 - Headbutt | 
Maelee Level: 22 EXP: 0/220 Ability: Cute Charm No. of Moves: 7
Moveset 1 - Covet 2 - Bullet Seed 3 - Protect 4 - Tail Slap 5 - Grass Knot 6 - Encore 7 - Rock Blast |

Thorne Level: 10 EXP: 0/100 Ability: Compoundeyes No. of Moves: 5
Moveset 1 - Leech Life 2 - Cross Poison 3 - Pin Missile 4 - Thunder Wave 5 - Screech | 
Vixen Level: 19 EXP: 0/190 No. of Moves: 6
Moveset 1 - Leech Seed 2 - Camouflage 3 - Protect 4 - Double Kick 5 - Toxic 6 - Feint Attack | | |
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3x Pokeball 3x Super Potion Water Gem Oran Berry Pecha Berry Persim Berry Pokeball Seal Smooth Rock Skull Fossil TM - Ice Beam (2/3) TM - Sunny Day (3/3) TM - Toxic (2/3) TM - Protect (1/3)
ET: 15
Amy  Stop, it's too late. 77 Trainee 0 RP Unspent Story EXP: 320 | Pokemon |
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Quell Level: 21 EXP: 0/210 Ability: Super Luck No. of Moves: 7(+2)
Moveset 1 - Me First 2 - Quick Attack 3 - Razor Wind 4 - Detect 5 - Double Team 6 - Bite 7 - - Feint Attack - Sucker Punch | 
Sora Level: 19 EXP: 150/190 Ability: Natural Cure No. of Moves: 6(+2)
Moveset 1 - Disarming Voice 2 - Astonish 3 - Sing 4 - Fury Attack 5 - Peck 6 - Round - Roost - Steel Wing | 
Riki Level: 8 EXP: 5/80 Ability: Lightningrod No. of Moves: 4(+2)
Moveset 1 - Tackle 2 - Thunder Wave 3 - Leer 4 - Howl -Fire Fang -Ice Fang | 
Dustbunny Level: 20 EXP: 35/200 Ability: Arena Trap No. of Moves: 7(+2)
Moveset 1 - Mud-Slap 2 - Bulldoze 3 - Sand Tomb 4 - Sand Attack 5 - Bite 6 - Rock Slide 7 - Dig - Signal Beam - Flail | | |
Items 3x Pokeball 1x Moon Ball 1x Lure Ball 2x Rare Candy 2x Super Potion 2x Revive 2x Sitrus Berry ET: 5
Kitty  Hold our breath For two long, boring days. Unspent Story EXP: 750 Argent Grunt 8 RP
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Tryce Level: 22 EXP: 0/220 No. of Moves: 7
Moveset 1 - Quick Attack 2 - Bite 3 - Sand Attack 4 - Swift 5 - Wish 6 - Baby Doll Eyes 7 - Refresh | 
Lady Level: 15 EXP: 0/150 No. of Moves: 6
Moveset 1 - Tackle 2 - Leer 3 - Sand Attack 4 - Bite 5 - Howl 6 - Rock Throw | 
NICKNAME Level: 0 EXP: 0/0 No. of Moves: 0
Moveset 1 - 2 - 3 - 4 - | | | |
Items 4xPokeball 6xPotion Persim Berry ET: 10
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