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[A]Universal Taijutsu
Topic Started: Aug 16 2015, 12:17 AM (185 Views)
Mu22keys
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Kyūkyoku no bōei[Ultimate defense]
Rank: D
Requirements: Expert Speed, User Taijutsu≥Opponent taijutsu
Description: The user is completely focused upon defense while in this stance, which makes counter-strikes impossible. The user is using his wrist and hand to redirect the momentum and general power of his opponents strike towards usually the ground, or somewhere to the side away from the User. The use of this jutsu in combat is mainly to buy time, but it can be used to tire out the opponent instead.

A large weakness of the stance is the fact that it can not block lower strikes, which means strikes below the belt slip right past users using this stance, and the fact that more skilled individuals can break through this stances defense. The reason it is a D rank, is it takes a ton of training to actually perfect the stance.
Edited by Mu22keys, Aug 18 2015, 04:50 PM.
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I feel like this needs more in-depth explanation as to how it works exactly, since standing still and deflecting blows via wrists is not much to go on. If anything it would be weird to do as such, as it would undoubtedly break the wrist as they aren't exactly renowned for being an especially tough set of bones.

If the technique requires fast reactions, then it needs to have a set requirement for speed stat; as that determines hand-speed, reflexes, and the like, and not the taijutsu stat. Also, I would suggest that it would be proven ineffective against opponents with a larger taijutsu stat; as they would be a lot more skillful than the user, and thus able to penetrate through this defense.

Explain the drawbacks of having to fight against shorter/taller people, as there is no concrete evidence as to what it actually does other than 'being more difficult'.

How can the stance be used to counter-attack? Why is it not usually used for that?
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In terms of word count, the technique is great. However there are still some issues I see with it.

It mentions that it sometimes uses legs to defend, yet I see no actual mentions of that anywhere else within the description of the technique; hence it should either be removed or properly explained.

You mention that it is used to counter blows by deflecting them; but you also mentioned that it is not usually used to counter strikes. Which leads it to being a bit of an oxymoron.

There is no mention of the level of taijutsu one requires to learn the technique despite the technique description mentioning that one has to have a high taijutsu stat in order to learn it; just noting that it needs to be higher than the opponent's taijutsu stat. Is this intentional? Or is there an actual taijutsu requirement in order to just learn the technique? You may have describe as needing a better taijutsu stat than the opponent in the description rather than as a requirement, and replace it with the minimal taijutsu stat needed to learn it instead.

You mention that it is difficult to maintain it for long periods of time; this should have a concrete value in that case. Would want to avoid people going 'Oh, I can last this long." "Oh, I can last even longer." etc.

Why must the user's strength be within 2? 2 what? Masteries? Tiers? It should be noted that 2 Masteries is a significant amount, and nothing to sneeze at. If someone of newbie level strength got punched by someone with average level strength; they would easily have broken bones if it was a direct hit. One mastery; not so much, but it would still hurt a significant amount.

I'm assuming that the user cannot perform any strikes whilst in this state as they focus entirely on defense. It should be noted within the description.

I would like you to connect pieces together; everything seems all over the place when it could easily just go from point A to point B; rather than point A to point J, and then B.

Please connect up your technique's description into a neat paragraph or two; this would make it easier to be implemented into the canon jutsu listing whilst keeping it neat and proper. I'd also like you to have the english translation have a space between the name. Please use the proper ≥ sign.

This is all I've got thus far for you to change~
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Edited it a bit more, changed a few things.
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