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Its been a while...; Possibly another dump!
Topic Started: Dec 10 2011, 02:23 AM (447 Views)
Espejo
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Woah - I haven't posted here in forever and a half! Well, I have been doing some music in that time; so here's one of the pieces! (I'll add more sometime)

Scrap Heap (Might Rename)
Length: 2.07
Genre: Other
Loops: Naw
Comment: A very odd song I did... I actually really like it cause it's quite catchy! Also, I think I got the 'broken' feel down, too! I originally intended it to be for an area in a game: a broken robot band playing in a rundown society's club. It was only meant to be one of their songs.


Look Around
Length: 1.22
Genre: Orchestral
Loops: Nope
Comment: You can tell I can never think of a good name! Well, this piece is just some 'oh my, that's a pretty song' kinda stuff. My cousin said it sounded like a song from a nature scene in Pocahontas! Haha...


Hope is a Virtue (SCRAPPED)
Length: 2.37
Genre: Other (?)
Loops: Nope
Comment: Another song the band plays in that game with the robot band! The orchestral strings and stuff are played as synths. [/badexcuse]


Thanks for listening~
Edited by Espejo, Jan 30 2012, 07:41 AM.
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It pleases me?
Oh, excellent - thank you.
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Scrap Heap - Magnificent melody, completely catchy, simply stupendous!
Happiness is like wetting yourself, everyone can see it, but only you can feel the warmth.
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Amazing alliteration! Merci, monsieur~
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beautiful! i wanna learn the drum part haha
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Wow, thanks. I'm sure it's easy to learn by ear! (Just fyi, the toms and drums are separate kits...)

Also, added a new song called Look Around - check it out in the first post! (Sorry about its shortness... I got a block :/ )
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Well, it was about time for me to get on my lazy ass in front of a computer to write some more music! So here's anew song, Hope is a Virtue. You can check it out in the first post.

Also, one day I might just lower the bitrate/sample rate so the files are smaller. One day...
Cheers, guys~
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Look Around - Kinda soothing, does seem almost disney-esque, abrupt ending, overall pretty nice

Hope is a Virtue - slow and kinda dull i'm afraid
Happiness is like wetting yourself, everyone can see it, but only you can feel the warmth.
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look around doesn't really seem to incorporate any feeling or atmosphere, at least not beyond the basic feeling of "oh hey look, we're doing something beautiful." Perhaps keeping a theme other than that in mind would help this song blossom.

hope is a virtue -- needs more bass. love that trumpet (?). lacks movement, perhaps switching up the beat a bit or adding an alternative every now and then would freshen that up.
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Look Around:
Hmm... Need more feeling for it, eh? Not sure how I'd do that - I sorta didn't have any thoughts about the song when I wrote it, I came up with all that stuff afterwards. Maybe change the settings on some of the instruments to add character could work... idk.
Also, it's hard to not do an abrupt ending when you wanna end with a bang. If you have any suggestions for a better ending, it'd really help.

Hope is a Virtue:
This one's my priority, just for the record. So it's a bit slow and dull? (even I have to agree D:)
I'll try more drastic drumbeat/progression changes between verses, hopefully that'll work. Also, so it needs more bass? Like a second bass guitar? More bass pedal? More deep piano? Timpani or something? I dunno, that's pretty much all the limitation I have for a band... If you can come up with something, that'd help a tonne.
Also, the lead is a sax~

Thanks for your help guys!
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Hope is a Virtue-
eh...hope doesn't look like the virtue in this one I'm afraid. This piece for me doesn't seem to pack a real punch. It has very dull emotion. I recommend adding some accents to the drums, and maybe adding some swells to the current instrumentation. I don't know what type of feel you are going for... so i can't really give advice on that.

With all this said, it has a good start and can definitely go places!
Good Luck :)
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i was thinking a more romantic orchestra, with a bit more brass or percussion to it; perhaps try phrases with some neat licks to accent the melody.

hope:
tbqh the bass guitar should have a sustaining note to add to the lower registries. if you don't want to do that, or it doesn't sound interesting enough, try other low strings or low brass. in a song featuring the sax and piano, it would be figured that a full jazz ensemble would be added alongside them. (you're only missing trombone and trumpet afaik)
i NEVER heard a kick throughout the song
if the sax is the main, make it more audible. its kinda hard to hear.
try key changes, or at least vary the chords a bit in the verses.
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Look Around: Okay, I might add some romantic trumpet or accents like you said in it! in love with nature, ah

Hope is a Virtue: Thanks for your help, guys - but I've decided to try a different song or remake it differently. The reason is, I got the sub-woofers out and bam - I was hit with a bunch of random, messy sounds. It sounded atrocious on speakers and only a little better on headphones (which I use to compose, btw). So I think I better just try something different. Sorry, and thank you. (I'll still fix Look Around, however)
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