| Hey there, guest! Either you forgot to log in or you're new here. If you're new, why don't you stop by and read the Lemon's Laws, maybe even join our fine forum? |
- Pages:
- 1
- 2
| Martyr; Something different | |
|---|---|
| Topic Started: Aug 12 2012, 10:03 PM (478 Views) | |
| John | Aug 12 2012, 10:03 PM Post #1 |
|
JB
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
I present an upcoming side-project I call, Martyr. Dubstep and techno meet the flavors of modern pop and electronica. "Grime" | Finished | 2012 | 2:37 http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/grime-martyr "Thriving Techno" (WIP song and title) | WIP | 2012 | 0:47 http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/fist-pump-song-thing "BOOM HEADSHOT" | Finished | 2012 | 2:31 Note on Thriving Techno: When the main synth lead comes in at 0:07 I know its not mixed right, and its busy. Fixing. Edited by John, Aug 17 2012, 02:19 AM.
|
| |
![]() |
|
| Masquerade | Aug 13 2012, 06:51 PM Post #2 |
|
boy howdy
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
grime that dubstep break at .42 is marvelous, and those lo-fi at 1.06 <3 you have a lot of really good stuff in this piece! it just needs expanding upon a little bit - that synth riff that goes into piano near the end could have a bit of variation if you're going to be playing it p much throughout the song. i would suggest using other dubwub riffs as well. thriving techno same problem as p much all your pieces - repetitive i thought .07 was just fine |
| |
![]() |
|
| John | Aug 13 2012, 06:54 PM Post #3 |
|
JB
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Thanks for the critique. I might continue on with these type songs in the future. |
| |
![]() |
|
| Espejo | Aug 15 2012, 11:18 AM Post #4 |
![]()
You lookin' at me, boi?
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Grime - Just like to say that your dubstep ability is fairly good and you go some great bits in the song. However, there is still the factor of being really repetitive - and in my opinion the riff isn't very good as it's too complex to be catchy. I would work on the riff and repetition, but the mixing and effects are pretty neat! Thriving Techno - can't seem to access this one... did you take it down? |
![]() |
|
| Demonlemon | Aug 15 2012, 03:54 PM Post #5 |
|
MY CHILDREN COMETH
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Grime - awesome, the end is a bit repetitive though Thriving Techno - Oops, looks like we can't find that page! |
| Happiness is like wetting yourself, everyone can see it, but only you can feel the warmth. | |
![]() |
|
| John | Aug 15 2012, 10:09 PM Post #6 |
|
JB
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Thriving Techno now has a new link guys. SoundCloud has the wrong title. I will fix that later. |
| |
![]() |
|
| Yoshin | Aug 16 2012, 07:21 AM Post #7 |
![]()
Lvl 17 Kakuna
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Grime: your dropping ability is great, you may become as good as doctor p or eos. |
![]() Steam - Youtube - Stream - Site - N A S T U M E | |
![]() |
|
| Kakkelin | Aug 16 2012, 08:55 PM Post #8 |
![]()
the fresh new talent tcotl needs
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
The guitar on Thriving Techno sounds kinda out of sync at the end. Also for christ's sake use a chord progression that hasn't been beaten to death by every pop artist of the twentieth century. |
| I know I'm not the first choice for heroics...and y'all've tried to kill me more than once. And, I don't fancy a single one of you at all. But... Actually, all that sounds pretty convincing. I wonder if Danger Mouse is on. | |
![]() |
|
| Demonlemon | Aug 16 2012, 11:57 PM Post #9 |
|
MY CHILDREN COMETH
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Thriving Techno - sounds cool so far |
| Happiness is like wetting yourself, everyone can see it, but only you can feel the warmth. | |
![]() |
|
| Masquerade | Aug 17 2012, 12:32 AM Post #10 |
|
boy howdy
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
fist pump song thing ok i dont know how many times i have to say it but stop making music that is repetitive. you have good motives but you can't stop at one phrase augh it's just really annoying also those claps so out of sync |
| |
![]() |
|
| John | Aug 17 2012, 02:19 AM Post #11 |
|
JB
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
NEW SONG "BOOM HEADSHOT" I KNOW THE SOUNDS AT THE BEGINNING SOUND OFF. THANKS. http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/boom-headshot-martyr-1 |
| |
![]() |
|
| Masquerade | Aug 17 2012, 03:56 AM Post #12 |
|
boy howdy
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
MIXING DUDE WORK ON THE MIXING A LOT i think you're good at dubstep because it's easy however, when you cut out to vocals you've got to really cut - cut all your reverb and excess effects, otherwise it's messy, like you've got here. also stop using that buildup thing in every one of your songs. |
| |
![]() |
|
| Espejo | Aug 17 2012, 02:08 PM Post #13 |
![]()
You lookin' at me, boi?
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
Thriving Techno - Very repetitive. If youwant to make it dance styled music, emphasise the beats, don't drown them out in a noisy synth - it'll help, trust me. BOOM HEADSHOT - "So sexy"? What? Well onto the song - the crash cymbal sounds really low quality and generally annoying - try and get a better sound, maybe? Anyway, other than the repetition as always, it's quite a good song! |
![]() |
|
| John | Oct 1 2012, 12:53 AM Post #14 |
|
JB
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
|
| |
![]() |
|
| Espejo | Oct 1 2012, 01:26 AM Post #15 |
![]()
You lookin' at me, boi?
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
|
1st Song - Where is the bass at the start? The dancing beat before the dubstep lacks power. Otherwise it's fairly good. 2nd Song - Nice. Not exactly memorable but nice all the same. 3rd and 4th song - See my previous critiques. Also, it's good to see you doing this still! Good job! |
![]() |
|
| 1 user reading this topic (1 Guest and 0 Anonymous) | |
| Go to Next Page | |
| « Previous Topic · Music · Next Topic » |
- Pages:
- 1
- 2












8:56 AM Jul 11