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Martyr; Something different
Topic Started: Aug 12 2012, 10:03 PM (478 Views)
John
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I present an upcoming side-project I call, Martyr.
Dubstep and techno meet the flavors of modern pop and electronica.


"Grime" | Finished | 2012 | 2:37
http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/grime-martyr

"Thriving Techno" (WIP song and title) | WIP | 2012 | 0:47
http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/fist-pump-song-thing

"BOOM HEADSHOT" | Finished | 2012 | 2:31

Note on Thriving Techno: When the main synth lead comes in at 0:07 I know its not mixed right, and its busy. Fixing.
Edited by John, Aug 17 2012, 02:19 AM.
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Masquerade
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grime
that dubstep break at .42 is marvelous, and those lo-fi at 1.06 <3
you have a lot of really good stuff in this piece! it just needs expanding upon a little bit - that synth riff that goes into piano near the end could have a bit of variation if you're going to be playing it p much throughout the song. i would suggest using other dubwub riffs as well.

thriving techno
same problem as p much all your pieces - repetitive
i thought .07 was just fine
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Aug 13 2012, 06:51 PM
grime
that dubstep break at .42 is marvelous, and those lo-fi at 1.06 <3
you have a lot of really good stuff in this piece! it just needs expanding upon a little bit - that synth riff that goes into piano near the end could have a bit of variation if you're going to be playing it p much throughout the song. i would suggest using other dubwub riffs as well.

thriving techno
same problem as p much all your pieces - repetitive
i thought .07 was just fine
Thanks for the critique. I might continue on with these type songs in the future.
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Grime - Just like to say that your dubstep ability is fairly good and you go some great bits in the song. However, there is still the factor of being really repetitive - and in my opinion the riff isn't very good as it's too complex to be catchy. I would work on the riff and repetition, but the mixing and effects are pretty neat!

Thriving Techno - can't seem to access this one... did you take it down?
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Grime - awesome, the end is a bit repetitive though

Thriving Techno - Oops, looks like we can't find that page!

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Thriving Techno now has a new link guys. SoundCloud has the wrong title. I will fix that later.
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Grime: your dropping ability is great, you may become as good as doctor p or eos.
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The guitar on Thriving Techno sounds kinda out of sync at the end.

Also for christ's sake use a chord progression that hasn't been beaten to death by every pop artist of the twentieth century.
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Thriving Techno - sounds cool so far
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fist pump song thing
ok i dont know how many times i have to say it but stop making music that is repetitive. you have good motives but you can't stop at one phrase augh it's just really annoying
also those claps
so out of sync
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NEW SONG "BOOM HEADSHOT" I KNOW THE SOUNDS AT THE BEGINNING SOUND OFF. THANKS.
http://soundcloud.com/soundscape-elegance/boom-headshot-martyr-1
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MIXING DUDE
WORK ON THE MIXING
A LOT
i think you're good at dubstep because it's easy
however, when you cut out to vocals you've got to really cut - cut all your reverb and excess effects, otherwise it's messy, like you've got here. also stop using that buildup thing in every one of your songs.
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Thriving Techno - Very repetitive. If youwant to make it dance styled music, emphasise the beats, don't drown them out in a noisy synth - it'll help, trust me.

BOOM HEADSHOT - "So sexy"? What? Well onto the song - the crash cymbal sounds really low quality and generally annoying - try and get a better sound, maybe? Anyway, other than the repetition as always, it's quite a good song!
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1st Song - Where is the bass at the start? The dancing beat before the dubstep lacks power. Otherwise it's fairly good.
2nd Song - Nice. Not exactly memorable but nice all the same.
3rd and 4th song - See my previous critiques.

Also, it's good to see you doing this still! Good job!
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