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| The Bean | Mar 14 2009, 07:29 AM |
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Right, good story Slink and it's very mysterious so far, which I like, but a few bits of criticism. 1. It's way too short! Try aiming for at least 1000 words per part. It might seem hard, but just some description here and will really help increase it. 2. The Dark Brotherhood worship Sithis, not Sanguine. And (as far as I know), Sithis isn't a daedric prince, he is a god. 3. Assassins FTW! |
 
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12:03 AM Nov 28
