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Writers Unleashed | Season 1
Topic Started: Nov 29 2015, 11:00 PM (24,267 Views)
SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Welcome to The Horror Closet's first, exclusive writing competition: Writers Unleashed™. We’ve been planning this for a long time and we believe we are now finally at a place where we can host it properly!


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In this competition you will be up against both the experienced & beginner creative writers of this forum, week after week, as you complete the challenges and are scored and ranked by the judges (TheCheetahwings and GhettoSpiritMedium) and the final judge and host, (SnazzyShadeEmily).The last writer standing, is the winner. We hope you choose to sign up for Writers Unleashed™ today,and join us for this competition, and to grow as a writer. You don't need to have any experience at all to atleast try, so we hope anyone with atleast a smidge of interest gives it a shot. The challenges will be posted weekly. Round 1 comes this Friday Night, due Thursday, December 10th at 12/11C. Most rounds will be posted Saturday but since it's Round 1, you get an extra day. Use it wisely. Results come every Saturday night starting at 6/5C and running two hours. I'll post the next round shortly after. The round themes will not specify a genre, so feel free to do whichever you want as they will all be graded fairly using the same basic scale. When your entry is complete, PM it to Me/SnazzyShadeEmily, and I'll send it to the others once the deadline has been reached. I hope you all consider joining! Also, please make entries an original work unless stated within the challenge post.


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SnazzyShadeEmily (Host)
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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TheCheetahwings

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1. Matty
2. MasterXPosed
3. TyeSays
4. Cman710
5. Joshua
6. Frame700
7. 100PercentCotton
8. SaviorMouse
9. Sid The Super Bitch
10. Kevin R.
11. Ni-Gunner
12. Zayday Williams
13. TheFinalBoy

14. Belly
15. Shiley740
16. Shawn
SEASON ONE WINNER:
Cman710/Chris



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Round One
Round Two
Round Three
Round Four
Round Five
Round Six

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Round 1 Results
Round 2 Results
Round 3 Results
Round 4 Results
Round 5 Results
Round 6 Results
All Scores Ranked
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Gettin it ready
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Dec 19 2015, 04:05 PM
Gettin it ready
Woo! :excited:
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TheCheetahwings
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I'm A Dead Bitch Baby!
Im ready
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I wasn’t prepared for you.
For wanting something.


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When you walk into the room. You pull me close and we start to move
And we're spinning with the stars above. And you lift me up in a wave of love
Ooh, baby, do you know what that's worth? Ooh heaven is a place on earth
They say in heaven love comes first. We'll make heaven a place on earth

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NI-Gunner
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Wow results are coming in early today. YAY! Thanks for the feedback Alec. Branch out more, take a risk. Message received! ;)
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Ni-Gunner - Christmas Past

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Overall I didn’t like this entry quite as much as your previous one, but it was still solid. I thought the banter at the dinner table was funny and enjoyable to read, but i couldn’t help but find the overall plot a little... simple? I feel like a lot more could’ve been done with the imagery personally. That being said, I did like the fact that the “Santa” of the story was over it all and it was pretty symbolic and well thought out. I did think the ending was a little forced for SHOCK value though, even if the music playing was pretty creepy & sad to imagine. Overall it was a well written and solid entry, it just doesn’t stand out as much as your previous entry did among the others!


MasterXPosed - A Lesson In Scientology

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When I first started reading I noticed how much cleaner & well written this was. I can tell you spent a lot more time perfecting it. So good job on that! I did get kind of confused with this piece of dialogue though : “JEFFREY: As you know, Christmas is a time you spend with your family and friends. But this year I had one choice, and that was to spend time with my friends.” -though I suppose you meant he chose to not spend it with family & instead he spent time with his friends? Aside from that the dialogue was MOSTLY on point! At times it felt a little stiff/rough, and could’ve benefited from slight editing to make it seem more natural. But for the most part I really enjoyed it and it was actually genuinely funny sometimes.

I really liked how you tied the “Intervention” into the story, though I wish it was about her being such a bitch in general tbh. Since her shopping “addiction” definitely didn’t excuse her being so rude to people in general (and judging by the other characters’ reaction to her, they didn’t like her bitchiness much either). I really liked Barry’s line in the intervention scene in particular. I actually screamed tbh. But I didn’t like his line about the fat chicks much since I think it distracted from Lisa’s bitchiness (since the impression I got was she was supposed to be a horrible-Alison type of person). Also for the challenge you did stray a tad from the image a BIT too much. Because there were only 3 people in front of the fire place, when there should be 4, and there weren’t 2 girls. Then again I suppose it’s possible that one of the girls is supposed to be Lisa >_> so I’m gonna let this pass. This was a huge improvement on the first one, and I like that you didn’t try to do TOO much with it. Though the ending did seem fairly rushed. Overall though, this was a really solid entry. Though I do have to ask, wtf is the title? What does it have to do with anything? :imfine:


Kevin R. - What’s For Lunch?

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You once again managed to surprise me with your entry. Not only was it incredibly enjoyable to read, but it took the picture used and presented it in an incredibly unique & creative way that I never would’ve imagined. The dialogue was on point throughout the whole script and kept me on the edge of my seat. It was surprisingly engaging for a story about a stolen lunchbox. I guess my only real complaint would be the twist ending where it was staged, I kinda was enjoying the melodramatic storyline about the conspiracy to get them fired by stealing a lunchbox. But the letter & relationship between Bill/Mike was touching enough that I ended up not minding too much. Really amazing entry!


Zayday Williams - Death & Funerals

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I won’t lie, I did miss the #WILD vibe from your previous entry. But I appreciated the fact that the storyline was far clearer & easier to understand. I loved the dialogue a lot, especially Greta calling Kelly Sadie’s “paramour”. I legit was NOT ready :imfine: And omg, I legit howled when Greta “destroyed” Kelly saying her daughter needed a “Man” to take care of her. And HELP @ Greta trying to buy Kelly off. overall this entry was really hilarious, and I loved the story and characters as well. I thought it fit the challenge perfectly, & you used it effectively. If I had to make any complaints it would be that it did take a few pages to really get going (but after it did, it didn’t stop!) and it did seem somewhat rushed at the end when Stanley rushed out to Sadie. I would’ve probably preferred to see some reconciliation between Greta & Sadie rather than ending so abruptly. Either that or just stick with Sadie & Kelly leaving her and that be the end. But other than that this entry was really great!


Cman710 - The Interrogation
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I have to admit I was expecting this to not be as engaging as it turned out when I saw it would be an interrogation. But I really liked that you reversed the roles and had Luke do the interrogating of the detective. It was a nice “twist” on something that could’ve been completely cliche. I do kinda wish that “Luke” was Kathy Griffin in the picture, and that she was just the person that led the group or something... I feel like it would’ve lifted the storyline and make the scenes feel even more “connected”. Well... that and Kathy Griffin destroying Adam like Luke did would’ve been really amazing to imagine. But what you have worked really well regardless. It was a really powerful entry, and I really loved the story behind it. It turned out great considering the issues you had with it before. I definitely think this is a step up from last week in terms of originality & uniqueness. But the dialogue was a bit more on the rough side in comparison (though when you got it right, it was truly great!). Overall it was a great & refreshing entry amongst what has been all comedies so far.


Matt - Penelope's Cowgirl Casanova Party
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If it wasn’t unfair to the other writers, I would probably grade this on a curve considering you only took like 2 hours to write it. But I’m happy you did regardless. I wish when Michael said “it’s a piece of cake!” He handed Kim a piece of cake. I’d have given you a ten just for that tbh. Also Omg @ the state farm joke. I legit screamed at that. “If I couldn’t get her a real horse, I would get her the second best thing.” I was honestly expecting a Sarah Jessica Parker joke. The cocaine joke was unecessary. Plus I imagine Cocaine is way more than 50 dollars. You should’ve used weed at least. :lolxd: really did like the humor in this for the most part though, I can tell you listened to my critiques tbh. It’s so short & snappy and not dragged out. Not to mention the humor didn’t rely on “meanness” like it sometimes can fall into (like Diva House chapter 4). It was really great. It also was really touching near the end with Penelope and her dad.

There is a pretty BIG issue with the entry though, as much as I liked the rest of the script. I have a feeling you either misunderstood the challenge or just got it wrong in the mix of things while rushing through it... But In the picture the cake is not only NOT Cowboy themed, but the cake throwing incident was indoors & between adults. It just didn’t fit the challenge’s criteria at all unfortunately. I feel like you thought the challenge was supposed to be BASED around the image rather than the exact image which is probably the cause of this. So overall it was a solid entry, just NOT for this challenge unfortunately. This is really why your score from me is on the lower side, because the fit the challenge score REALLY drags it down by a lot. Which is really frustrating because everything else was on point.
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
TheCheetahwings
Dec 19 2015, 04:06 PM
Im ready
Who isn't? :excited:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
Reading these 2! :excited:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
We had some different reactions!
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Dec 19 2015, 04:11 PM
We had some different reactions!
Ken misreading Jack's title tho! :excited:
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