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Writers Unleashed | Season 1
Topic Started: Nov 29 2015, 11:00 PM (24,198 Views)
SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Welcome to The Horror Closet's first, exclusive writing competition: Writers Unleashed™. We’ve been planning this for a long time and we believe we are now finally at a place where we can host it properly!


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In this competition you will be up against both the experienced & beginner creative writers of this forum, week after week, as you complete the challenges and are scored and ranked by the judges (TheCheetahwings and GhettoSpiritMedium) and the final judge and host, (SnazzyShadeEmily).The last writer standing, is the winner. We hope you choose to sign up for Writers Unleashed™ today,and join us for this competition, and to grow as a writer. You don't need to have any experience at all to atleast try, so we hope anyone with atleast a smidge of interest gives it a shot. The challenges will be posted weekly. Round 1 comes this Friday Night, due Thursday, December 10th at 12/11C. Most rounds will be posted Saturday but since it's Round 1, you get an extra day. Use it wisely. Results come every Saturday night starting at 6/5C and running two hours. I'll post the next round shortly after. The round themes will not specify a genre, so feel free to do whichever you want as they will all be graded fairly using the same basic scale. When your entry is complete, PM it to Me/SnazzyShadeEmily, and I'll send it to the others once the deadline has been reached. I hope you all consider joining! Also, please make entries an original work unless stated within the challenge post.


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SnazzyShadeEmily (Host)
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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TheCheetahwings

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1. Matty
2. MasterXPosed
3. TyeSays
4. Cman710
5. Joshua
6. Frame700
7. 100PercentCotton
8. SaviorMouse
9. Sid The Super Bitch
10. Kevin R.
11. Ni-Gunner
12. Zayday Williams
13. TheFinalBoy

14. Belly
15. Shiley740
16. Shawn
SEASON ONE WINNER:
Cman710/Chris



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Round One
Round Two
Round Three
Round Four
Round Five
Round Six

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Round 1 Results
Round 2 Results
Round 3 Results
Round 4 Results
Round 5 Results
Round 6 Results
All Scores Ranked
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Dec 27 2015, 08:55 PM
Get ready gals
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Its coming aah
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Dec 27 2015, 08:57 PM
Its coming aah
Bring it on™ :rihcry:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Kevin's 'Nope': Your job this week was to write a dry comedy haunted house entry. I do feel you captured the dry aspect well, and the setting, but I feel you sorely lacked in the comedy department. Your plot was very interesting and the parts with Lauren casually discussing their deaths was nice too, but it missed the mark most of the time for me. I liked the Brat's talk with Stacie, the mid-2000s references with the car radio, Lauren and David being desensitized and just going with the flow, but when it all came together I can't help but feel it fell flat. To write a dry comedy you don't need to suck the life out of the story, but this one did feel like it was a tad lifeless. The dialogue you used still wasn't perfect but I did like it better this week than last time around I think, especially the Brat, who was undoubtedly the highlight of this script to me. In the future if you plan to write another dry comedy I hope you remember that part of that needs to still feel fun, and less like everyone's simply going through the motions. Also, I wish the mom had done more.


Greg's 'Nothing To Lose': This was a thrill to read! While it started less than stellar and I found myself unengaged in the going ons, as the story picked up, it got better and better. I'm very glad to see you go above the cliche and expected route of having a girl simply lose her virginity to an alien, which just wouldn't be nearly as compelling as this. Minnie and Marty did make sense together as a couple, which is good because so much of this relies on whether they're even believable, and I'm glad you succeeded with that. The paranormal glow that overcame Minnie, and then Marty, was well done without being overly complicated or needing further explanation, although I wouldn't have minded one. While I feel you met the mark on most things, I sadly felt your dialogue was less than superb and could've used a few more drafts to feel more natural, mainly with the side characters. Minnie and Marty's was the best of the bunch, even if it wasn't too amazing, but the rest just came off somewhat forced and repetitive. I hope you can work on the dialogue because just about everything else in your entry was really good and a blast to read.


Ni-Gunner's 'The Shadow': Wow. That was quite a ride. I have very mixed emotions on this, but overall I do think the writing was consistently strong, even though I'm not quite sure this met the mark of the challenge at hand. I really appreciate the innovative approach you took, but the baby shower ended up a small glimmer of a plot centered around anything but. I did really appreciate your approach to the crime/noir genre and felt you did it well, I just wish you could've found a way to integrate that Baby Shower as more than a cliffhanger ending. The way you had Blaine age from 5 to late 20s was pretty cool and smart of you, as we got to see him progress into the villian he was, but I feel you rushed the last part and would've liked to see more than what we got of the late 20s Blaine. I'm also a tad confused on the vampirism, and would've liked a tighter reasoning for all of that. All in all, this was not your best entry, but it was the most original, and that's something you should be really proud of.


Tye's 'The Wedding': Oh my GOD TYLER. Once again, I am slayed. I don't know how you were worried this wasn't a thriller omg, it was fucking wild! The wedding started out very normal and calm, and I really am glad we got those early scenes of character development before you prompty destroyed the status quo and had the shooters come in. I really felt for the characters from the short scenes you'd given, so to see them die was honestly super sad. I really appreciate that not only did you not go for an unrealistic happy ending, you also did a good job to show fighiting fire with fire is literally pointless, and kept it relevant with all the police scandals surrounding America of late. As usual, your dialogue was crisp, natural, and a delight to read. This really all was such a fun read, and I'm glad you kept it so short as it felt very tight and there were no fillers, everything felt cohesive, compact, and built off the other scene. Now, I would have liked more personality for Attackers 2&3 as 1 got all their spotlight, and they mostly felt like plot devices more than characters, but that's really my only complaint here. Really great job, Tye!


Vincent's 'Gunpowder and Anal': Okay that was legit the most fun script I've read all competition I think. Not only did you succeed this challenge, you also made this so full of life and a joy to read. Romantic comedy is arguably the most vapid genre of film, and you embraced that with open arms in this romantic comedy, which often edged on the verge of satire, and I really liked that instead of shying away from the tropes of the genre, you embraced them head on and made them your own. The funniest thing about this is I've seen a Lifetime film with a plot similar to this one's (but that also had a side chick who went crazy and killed the 'Pete') which made this whole thing funnier to me. Your characters were all really enjoyable and exciting to read; I grew to care for them by the end of the 21 pages. They were all /such/ stereotypes in a way that it made perfect and hilarious sense. Although I honestly thought Daniel was gay at first omg. Keep the good work up, this was brilliant!


Chris' 'Meet the Madness Family': That was definently a unique entry from you, so props for that. Now sadly while I appreciate you going beyond the expected, this still wasn't too great in itself. I did like Haley, she was funny and a nice spot to this, also Mr. Madness, but the rest of the characters were as one note as they can be. Honestly even the two I liked were one note caricatures. There was the goofy husband (Donnie), nagging wife (Haley), the better than everyone guy (Mr. Madness), the douche (Whatever the brothers name was) and you put them all together and get more of the same. So much of this was typical and cliche while some was unique and that really contradicted itself. I feel you didn't rise above what you were given, and you kept the entire thing comfortably vanilla. This would've heavily benefitted from more drafts, a nice twist to a predictable story, and better characterization. That said, your dialogue was not the worst part this week, so that's good!


Matt's 'The Amulet': Thank God you actually wrote a decent entry for the first time this competition. I'm very glad to see you didn't veer off too far into comedy, or attempt any racist stuff like we all expected. This was well handled and a really nice read. I do think the 'horror' was severely lacking, and I could've used a lot more emphasis on it as the parts with the murderous ghosts felt almost out of place with this plot, and amounted to little emotional affect. So while you did fit the challenge, you really needed to broaden the horror so this can feel less like a dramedy and more like the horror short expected of you. Besides that, the characters were all written well enough, albeit stereotypical. They were definently. a bit too stereotypical and I'd work to really separate these from the typical and make them your own, but for now, it wasn't a huge concern of mine. Your dialogue was not overly forced here as you thankfully veered away from the OTT humor that has been present in most of your writing, and wrote something much preferable (and funnier). Nice job!


Car's 'Scars are for the Living': I appreciate you trying something different with the zombie genre but I also feel this left a lot to be desired. The overall tea party was somewhat unsubstantial to the story, as was the entire zombie apocalypse having little affect. Now that I have time to actually reflect on this though, I somewhat like your choice to not make the apocalypse as in your face as it could've been. The script certainly held an eerieness the entire way through, and I never felt comfortable, which was a nice touch from you. Also using gay dads was nice representation and always nice to see. The ending felt very powerful to me as well, because sleep is really our one true escape and now that's been taken away from Henry too so it's very sad and depressing in a way that you just know no matter how many little moments he enjoys now, this apocalypse has destroyed the foundation of their lives. Not the best, but far from the worst, entry and I look forward to seeing you back next week (hopefully).
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Oop, yep, I figured some of my dialogue would be an issue, but ahhhhhh, ty 4 the comments, can't wait 2 hear from every1 else! :excited:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Glad you took it all well
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Kevin R.
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Ooh, burned.

TBH, I was kind of expecting that. Not my best work by a long shot. Thanks for the honesty, though. Better that I get an honest, critical review than a flattering and phony one.
Edited by Kevin R., Dec 27 2015, 09:06 PM.
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Sorry :poordat:
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OMG IM SO HAPPY YOU LOVED IT!!! I loved every minute of writing it so I'm glad it translated well!


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SnazzyShadeEmily
Dec 27 2015, 09:04 PM
Glad you took it all well
Well, ofc, I love constructive criticism :excited:

Now every1 else betta get 2 reading/rihplying 2 the comments 2! :rihsit:
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