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Writers Unleashed | Season 1
Topic Started: Nov 29 2015, 11:00 PM (24,184 Views)
SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Welcome to The Horror Closet's first, exclusive writing competition: Writers Unleashed™. We’ve been planning this for a long time and we believe we are now finally at a place where we can host it properly!


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In this competition you will be up against both the experienced & beginner creative writers of this forum, week after week, as you complete the challenges and are scored and ranked by the judges (TheCheetahwings and GhettoSpiritMedium) and the final judge and host, (SnazzyShadeEmily).The last writer standing, is the winner. We hope you choose to sign up for Writers Unleashed™ today,and join us for this competition, and to grow as a writer. You don't need to have any experience at all to atleast try, so we hope anyone with atleast a smidge of interest gives it a shot. The challenges will be posted weekly. Round 1 comes this Friday Night, due Thursday, December 10th at 12/11C. Most rounds will be posted Saturday but since it's Round 1, you get an extra day. Use it wisely. Results come every Saturday night starting at 6/5C and running two hours. I'll post the next round shortly after. The round themes will not specify a genre, so feel free to do whichever you want as they will all be graded fairly using the same basic scale. When your entry is complete, PM it to Me/SnazzyShadeEmily, and I'll send it to the others once the deadline has been reached. I hope you all consider joining! Also, please make entries an original work unless stated within the challenge post.


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SnazzyShadeEmily (Host)
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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TheCheetahwings

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1. Matty
2. MasterXPosed
3. TyeSays
4. Cman710
5. Joshua
6. Frame700
7. 100PercentCotton
8. SaviorMouse
9. Sid The Super Bitch
10. Kevin R.
11. Ni-Gunner
12. Zayday Williams
13. TheFinalBoy

14. Belly
15. Shiley740
16. Shawn
SEASON ONE WINNER:
Cman710/Chris



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Round One
Round Two
Round Three
Round Four
Round Five
Round Six

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Round 1 Results
Round 2 Results
Round 3 Results
Round 4 Results
Round 5 Results
Round 6 Results
All Scores Ranked
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Matty
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If you're really doing this, I want to help.
And it's alright, calling out for somebody
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I’ve been recruiting for the Rebellion for a long time.
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
WHERE ARE THEY KENNY MY GOD
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Matty
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If you're really doing this, I want to help.
I love one direction
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I’ve been recruiting for the Rebellion for a long time.
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
*patiently waits* :sipscream:
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Zayday Williams
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Im scurred


"Shh!"
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WORKS-IN-PROGRESS:
20 Questions
Scream Queens

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Matty
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If you're really doing this, I want to help.
http://s15.zetaboards.com/The_Horror_Closet/single/?p=8143802&t=7990322
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TheCheetahwings
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I'm A Dead Bitch Baby!
Sent my comments! :snazzrih:
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I wasn’t prepared for you.
For wanting something.


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When you walk into the room. You pull me close and we start to move
And we're spinning with the stars above. And you lift me up in a wave of love
Ooh, baby, do you know what that's worth? Ooh heaven is a place on earth
They say in heaven love comes first. We'll make heaven a place on earth

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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Kenny's Comments:

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Matty - The Amulet
QUINCEAÑERA - HORROR


I was pleasantly surprised to see this put the story first & wasn’t over saturated with comedy (as much as I enjoy it). I was also happy to see the characters weren’t walking stereotypes like I think everyone expected them to be, so well done! Overall I think the entry was a huge step forward for you, but it still suffers from clearly being rushed. Obviously in this case it wasn’t entirely your fault, but I really hope in future rounds you use all of the time you have to really perfect your entry rather than just outlining it & then rushing through the actual writing in the last hour or two.
The dialogue was mostly solid, though there were some instances where it felt a bit stiff. I feel like you’ve mostly practiced comedic writing rather than serious, but I really am happy you tried something different with a more serious entry regardless.
I really liked how you set up the narrative before jumping into the horror aspect, but I do think that it would benefit from being a few pages longer. Because as is with the actual “horror” aspect being only 3 or so pages it doesn’t feel like enough. I would’ve liked if when Mia was telling the story, you showed a flashback or something to give the script as a whole more of a horror feel to really tie it all together! I also feel like the ending was really jarring, like there should’ve been more to it but you just ended it so you wouldn’t be any later.
Overall this is probably my favorite entry from you. I just hope in the coming weeks you really use your time more effectively, so your writing can really shine (bright like a Diamond :loverih: )


Chris - Meet The Madness Family
Family Reunion - Superhero
I won’t lie, I was somewhat disappointed when you picked
“Family Reunion - Superhero” because it seemed too expected of you. Thankfully the entry wasn’t as cliche or predictable as it could’ve been. I was really worried it’d be TOO much like “The Incredibles” but I thought the fact that Haley was a superhero from a super villain family was a nice change. Since it takes the challenge & does something different with it. I thought it was actually really funny too, something your first two entries lacked (though it wasn’t a negative in their case since they were fairly serious entries), which was definitely a breath of fresh air. I do think that it was a little rough but I realize you were kinda rushing through it because you were sick & wouldn’t be able to write from the 24th-26th. One thing I did miss was the really well structured storylines from the first two entries, but even so I did enjoy some of the spontaneity this brought to the script. So for future entries I’d definitely like to see a happy medium between the two! Overall it’s not my favorite entry from you, but I think you did a good job with what you had, even if it could’ve been a lot better with some editing.


Zayday Williams - Gunpowder & Anal
Murder Conspiracy - Romantic Comedy

First of all the title is amazing. I legit wasn’t ready :fangirl: . And honestly the rest of the script was just as amazing. First of all omg @the Tara Reid reference again. You aren’t slick. But wow this entry was hilarious & creative and honestly your best entry by a longshot. It was 21 pages long but doesn’t drag at all. I LOVED your creative use of the genre and murder conspiracy, and thought you tied them together perfectly without taking away from either. They meshed surprisingly well together and you really made me feel & ship the romantic interests (which is one of those things that if you go wrong with it tends to be a disaster). You really nailed the challenge. I also loved the characters a and dialogue so much. Honestly everything about this entry was great. It was so wild & entertaining and enjoyable to read. It was just an overall amazing entry. I especially loved the music choices which really lifted the entry. This review is only so short because I can really not say much beyond how much I loved it. Keep up the great work! :snazzrih:


Kevin R. - Nope
Haunted House - Dry Comedy

This is probably one of your weaker entries, but I still really enjoyed it. I really loved the ghost characters you came up with and their interaction with the living characters. I just wish that we got to see even more of them than we did! Especially the mom and the brat, which were by far my favorites. I honestly probably wouldn’t have minded much if you just focused entirely on the family of ghosts because they were so great tbh. Despite this I thought you executed the challenge fairly well, and it definitely fit the “dry comedy” tone even though it would seem easy to branch too far into horror with this type of script. I really loved the twist ending too, which is always appriciated in a short story like this. Your dialogue was on point as usual, especially for the brat and the emo. Their interractions with the living characters was by far the most interesting. Unfortunately the mom was really underused for what could’ve ended up the most entertaining character. I thought the overall entry was really well written & professional. I do feel like you could’ve done way MORE with the idea, because it just doesn’t feel as complete & full as your previous two entries did. With those you made every page count while with this entry it felt like there should’ve been more to it. Still an overall solid entry, I just wish there was something to lift it beyond that.


Shiley740 - Nothing To Lose
Losing Virginity - Scifi
Queen Laci Green impacting the title! :snazzrih: On a serious note though, this entry was really great. I really loved the set up prior to the actual “losing virginity” scene because it didn’t feel unnecessary or overly lengthy and the scifi/losing virginity was still the forefront of the story . The characters were great & I really loved the creative name choices :creep: . I thought you took an idea that could’ve been pretty predictable (losing virginity to an alien) and made it really fresh & unique. The sex scene itself was WILD & had me screaming the whole time, though tbh imagining it as a real scene it could actually be pretty horrifying depending how it was done. I also thought the dialogue was really great for the most part, though it was probably one of the weaker parts of the entry (mainly because it just didn’t stand out as much as the other aspects). Ngl, this is an entry I’d probably actually like to see as a full script/movie, since it’d really work as one with the great characters & setting. Overall you really slayed w/your first entry so I’m glad you decided to join!


Ni-Gunner - The Shadow
Baby Shower - Crime/Film Nior

This entry is way darker than I expected! I do have to say, when it comes to fitting the challenge it’s really mixed. On one hand you completely NAILED the genre. The imagery was fantastic and amazingly stylized, and the dialogue is dramatic in a way that I can picture it in a film noir movie, on the other hand the baby shower seems pretty irrelevant to the plot & overall entry which was fairly disappointing. I would’ve loved to see more of the imagery tied to the baby shower, because as is it feels like the story leads up to it and then just ends. I also feel like the story line felt somewhat disjointed at times, just due to the shifting through past & present in such a short entry. I feel like the storyline would’ve been far clearer had you just followed a more structured timeline. and reverted back Overall the entry is fairly unique & well written, it just failed to meet the criteria of the challenge.


Belly - Scars Are For The Living
Tea Party - Zombie

Ashlyn Greene serving Ashley Greene :iuss: This entry was really great I thought. You took the genre/scenario and portrayed them in a different yet effective way. I thought that you’d go the expected route & just have a bunch of zombies attack someone at a tea party, but you chose to go a more subtle route which really I thought really benefit the entry. That being said I do wish the zombie aspect was explored a BIT more, which could've been shown through flashbacks or something. Because as is it really nails the aftermath of a zombie apocalypse but it doesn't really show the zombies as much as it could've. I also have to say that I wish the tea party played a bigger role, but it wasn’t so small that it hurts your score that much. I really loved all the characters! The end actually made me pretty sad too with it ending on such a dark note. But really great first entry from you!


TyeSays - The Wedding
Wedding - Thriller

Ahhhhh :fangirl: the setting/character descriptions legit never cease to destroy me. But oh my god this entry was so shocking & horrifying. I honestly wasn’t expecting that from you, but it was also really great. I do feel that it felt slightly too fast paced, since it IS only 11 pages. But the only time it seemed too quick really was the reveal & the motive, essentially. I feel like there should’ve been a bit more time to adjust before the reveal. Overall though this entry was crazy intense & suspenseful which definitely executed the genre to it’s advantage. It actually reminds me of Kill Bill’s opening a tad, but it never really branches off into feeling unoriginal, even if it’s not incredibly unique in that sense. I really loved all the characters despite their short screentime (especially due to your creative descriptions) which made their eventual demise even more upsetting (especially the mother :sadga: ). I was honesstly really shocked by the entry, not in a quality sense (since you typically serve that :loverih: ) but just by the overall tone. It was really effective and well written. Really amazing entry and a great comeback after not submitting last week. This is definitely one of my favorite entries this week, so I’m really glad you came back!

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Matty
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Yeah I've gotten so used to writing comedy than it feels so weird to jump back into serious writing & find my footing there, but hopefully I can serve more of that vers in the upcoming entries if I make it 2 the next round or just work on it more in my writing in general. It was obviously a bit on the weaker side due to being rushed but yeah if I survive 2 next week I am gonna put more time into it.
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
Ahhhh omg Ken ty 4 liking it so much, I changed so much so I could try & deliver the least predictable plot possible, so glad that paid off, even tho ya, I can definitely c where some of the dialogue needs tightening up, so I hope I improve next week if I'm not gone! :getchagood:
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