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Writers Unleashed | Season 1
Topic Started: Nov 29 2015, 11:00 PM (24,113 Views)
SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Welcome to The Horror Closet's first, exclusive writing competition: Writers Unleashed™. We’ve been planning this for a long time and we believe we are now finally at a place where we can host it properly!


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In this competition you will be up against both the experienced & beginner creative writers of this forum, week after week, as you complete the challenges and are scored and ranked by the judges (TheCheetahwings and GhettoSpiritMedium) and the final judge and host, (SnazzyShadeEmily).The last writer standing, is the winner. We hope you choose to sign up for Writers Unleashed™ today,and join us for this competition, and to grow as a writer. You don't need to have any experience at all to atleast try, so we hope anyone with atleast a smidge of interest gives it a shot. The challenges will be posted weekly. Round 1 comes this Friday Night, due Thursday, December 10th at 12/11C. Most rounds will be posted Saturday but since it's Round 1, you get an extra day. Use it wisely. Results come every Saturday night starting at 6/5C and running two hours. I'll post the next round shortly after. The round themes will not specify a genre, so feel free to do whichever you want as they will all be graded fairly using the same basic scale. When your entry is complete, PM it to Me/SnazzyShadeEmily, and I'll send it to the others once the deadline has been reached. I hope you all consider joining! Also, please make entries an original work unless stated within the challenge post.


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SnazzyShadeEmily (Host)
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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TheCheetahwings

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1. Matty
2. MasterXPosed
3. TyeSays
4. Cman710
5. Joshua
6. Frame700
7. 100PercentCotton
8. SaviorMouse
9. Sid The Super Bitch
10. Kevin R.
11. Ni-Gunner
12. Zayday Williams
13. TheFinalBoy

14. Belly
15. Shiley740
16. Shawn
SEASON ONE WINNER:
Cman710/Chris



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Round One
Round Two
Round Three
Round Four
Round Five
Round Six

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Round 1 Results
Round 2 Results
Round 3 Results
Round 4 Results
Round 5 Results
Round 6 Results
All Scores Ranked
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
shiley740
Jan 9 2016, 08:49 PM
SnazzyShadeEmily
Jan 9 2016, 08:45 PM
He says "theyre going"... an openended answer
Ken be less later next time! :excited:
Gotta wonder how far theyve gone...
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Jan 9 2016, 08:50 PM
shiley740
Jan 9 2016, 08:49 PM
SnazzyShadeEmily
Jan 9 2016, 08:45 PM
He says "theyre going"... an openended answer
Ken be less later next time! :excited:
Gotta wonder how far theyve gone...
Come on Ken! :excited:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
COME THRU MAMA
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Jan 9 2016, 08:58 PM
COME THRU MAMA
Gotta get it all posted b4 5 am! :excited:
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Alec's Reviews:

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Kevin's 'Jack & Jill': That was quite a read. I feel you relied a bit too much on your source material, especially since the less homages to that trash - the better, but it had some bright spots. This was fast paced, too fast really, but it did make for a fun reading experience as it literally just starts and never stops until the very end. I could be totally off here but this did all end up looking rushed but I'm glad you managed to put together a plot atleast. As for the plot itself, well, it was certainly one of the better parts as it felt original and fun, but the execution wasn't ideal. I don't know if it was intentional or due to a lack of ideas, but the way the story literally starts out of nowhere and never really becomes less than "characters doing things simply to move the plot" really hurt this to me. I can't think of an actual reason Jack did the costume except for "The Story Required It" which is a big problem when the basis for the story is in this development. I think the whole Halloween idea was inspired and I really wish you could've done that in a way that was less forced and built naturally. As for the dialogue, well I think this was not your best entry in that department by a lot. Your dialogue has never been the best thing about these entries, but in an entry driven by dialogue, this really needed some sharper and more natural lines to drive this home. Sadly, I didn't seem to find much of that, but with a little more time spent editing, or having someone revise it for you even, I feel you could fix that as none of it stood out as dreadful, it all just felt meh. I really hope if you make it to the next round that you can bring back the quality of your first (and somewhat second) entries, as I know you have it in you. Thankfully, this did fit the challenge reasonably well, which is one of the biggest things I can hope for. Also, this is totally random but I imagined Jenny as Jenny Slate and if this was ever made I'd want Jenny to play Jenny - just a fun lil' fact!


Matt's '50 Shades of Grey': As I'm sure you know, given you wrote this, this did not fit the challenge, at all. That's quite a shame really, as from a writing standpoint, this was your best entry yet. This plot was inspired and flowed at a really nice pace, and I somehow didn't see the end coming even if it makes perfect sense looking back. I'm glad you elevated this beyond staying stagnant with the 1-2 punch of killing Jay and then revealing her husband with the new "Jay". That development leads me to crave a backstory although it's pretty easy to assume the original Jay died and they've spent the time since replacing him and ending up unsatisfied each time. This dialogue was not your best, but it was good enough and none of it felt too forced or offbase. This wasn't the most original plot in the world, but it also did the job decently, and like I've said, if you had actually done the challenge, this all would've been a solid entry. But I don't know how far you'd like me to stretch to fit this to "50 Shades of Grey" when the only thing even slightly reminiscent of that is Charlene's mopey attitude. I know you struggled with this, but I wish you'd switched titles or tried to come up with a more appropriate plot, instead of trying to pass this off as "50 Shades of Grey". I'm really dissapointed you didn't come through on that aspect, but glad you managed to hit the other three. Overall, from a writing standpoint this is your best entry, but from a "fit the challenge" point, it's quite possibly your worst.


Greg's 'Teaching Ms. Tingle': What drugs were you on when you made this? This was fucking insane. I'd have to say this is quite easily one of the most off-the-wall and original entries of this entire competition so far. Now, it was far from perfect, but I so appreciate your creativity and risks here. I'd have to say the title feels a little strange to the material provided, but I can at least see how it's possible, even if it's not perfectly fitting. The plot was also very fun to read (even if I had to reread parts several times as so much was going on) and kept taking turns I didn't expect. The overuse of puns and oneliners in the dialogue worked well with the end twist of it all being a delusion, and I appreciated it as your best dialogue yet. I definently would have liked a more calmly paced story at times, but given this was all a delusion inside a bored worker's head, I can really see why this was so chaotic. All the weapons were hilarious, and the whole brutality in general was just so insane and I was dying a good portion of the time. The hair-saw >>>. Not to mention Evangeline was so rootable for and hilarious, so I'm glad she tore Jalina to fucking shreds in the end, with that disgusting way to die. The way this escalated was nicely done, culminating in Jalina's gruesome murder, and all of that over some seemingly bad products was just great. I would've appreceated some more substance to this, along with a clearer ending, but it was otherwise pretty solid.


Chris' 'Leprechaun: Back 2 tha Hood': Like with Greg's entry, this was very wild. I thoroughly enjoyed your entry, even if the basic premise was a tad stereotypical. One thing I noticed is how much this entry screams "I'm White" because your depiction of the ghetto was pretty stereotypical, and both of the people we saw who live there were mere charicatures (Hooker, Thug). But aside from that, I enjoyed this a lot, especially watching as George slowly cracked, even if his meltdown was way over the top, because it fit. The dialogue was okay, nothing I'd write home about, but it didn't ever stand out too much as bad (except for George using "you know what" at least three times during his meltdown) so kudos on that. This definently wasn't groundbreaking or super original, but it accomplished what it set out to do and never became more than it needed. A few risks wouldn't have hurt, but I'm glad you decided to work on getting a simpler story right than tackling a complex one.
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
Ahhhhhh ty so much 4 the compliments, I wasn't sure if it would work out as well since I originally imagined it as more of a Charlie's Angels kind of scenario, but it never worked out & I got stuck, so I'm glad the wildness paid off :icant: But ya, I can c where it wouldn't necessarily be that clear, but I was trying 2 keep it up 2 the readers' imagination as 2 y exactly things went the way they did, even tho that can still be messy :sensual: I'm glad I improved on my dialogue tho cuz I worked rly hard on making sure the development leading up 2 the wild shit was more dialogue-driven so it could be a more natural progress 2 the chaos! :excited:
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
That essay reply >
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Yas. <3 I'm glad that you enjoyed it at least. I understand the whole hood thing, I've personally never been there so all I could do was go off of movies. Honestly. :rip:
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shiley740
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"This isn't over...this isn't over by a long shot!"
SnazzyShadeEmily
Jan 9 2016, 09:19 PM
That essay reply >
Ikr, long replies >>> :excited:
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Cman710
Jan 9 2016, 09:23 PM
Yas. <3 I'm glad that you enjoyed it at least. I understand the whole hood thing, I've personally never been there so all I could do was go off of movies. Honestly. :rip:
I could tell :letsnot:
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