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Writers Unleashed | Season 1
Topic Started: Nov 29 2015, 11:00 PM (24,310 Views)
SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
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Welcome to The Horror Closet's first, exclusive writing competition: Writers Unleashed™. We’ve been planning this for a long time and we believe we are now finally at a place where we can host it properly!


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In this competition you will be up against both the experienced & beginner creative writers of this forum, week after week, as you complete the challenges and are scored and ranked by the judges (TheCheetahwings and GhettoSpiritMedium) and the final judge and host, (SnazzyShadeEmily).The last writer standing, is the winner. We hope you choose to sign up for Writers Unleashed™ today,and join us for this competition, and to grow as a writer. You don't need to have any experience at all to atleast try, so we hope anyone with atleast a smidge of interest gives it a shot. The challenges will be posted weekly. Round 1 comes this Friday Night, due Thursday, December 10th at 12/11C. Most rounds will be posted Saturday but since it's Round 1, you get an extra day. Use it wisely. Results come every Saturday night starting at 6/5C and running two hours. I'll post the next round shortly after. The round themes will not specify a genre, so feel free to do whichever you want as they will all be graded fairly using the same basic scale. When your entry is complete, PM it to Me/SnazzyShadeEmily, and I'll send it to the others once the deadline has been reached. I hope you all consider joining! Also, please make entries an original work unless stated within the challenge post.


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SnazzyShadeEmily (Host)
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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TheCheetahwings

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1. Matty
2. MasterXPosed
3. TyeSays
4. Cman710
5. Joshua
6. Frame700
7. 100PercentCotton
8. SaviorMouse
9. Sid The Super Bitch
10. Kevin R.
11. Ni-Gunner
12. Zayday Williams
13. TheFinalBoy

14. Belly
15. Shiley740
16. Shawn
SEASON ONE WINNER:
Cman710/Chris



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Round One
Round Two
Round Three
Round Four
Round Five
Round Six

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Round 1 Results
Round 2 Results
Round 3 Results
Round 4 Results
Round 5 Results
Round 6 Results
All Scores Ranked
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Matty
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If you're really doing this, I want to help.
Um alec edit the post so we know who has taken what so far
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I’ve been recruiting for the Rebellion for a long time.
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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
I already have so ://
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Cman710
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T'CHALLA OF WAKANDA
Can't start tonight. 8 hour shift tomorrow. God help me.
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GhettoSpiritMedium
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“I’m getting seriously tired of saving your life.”
HELP I'm so excited for these entries
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There's nothing a shadowhunter can't do in heels.
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TheCheetahwings
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I'm A Dead Bitch Baby!
I'm ready :rihthink:
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I wasn’t prepared for you.
For wanting something.


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When you walk into the room. You pull me close and we start to move
And we're spinning with the stars above. And you lift me up in a wave of love
Ooh, baby, do you know what that's worth? Ooh heaven is a place on earth
They say in heaven love comes first. We'll make heaven a place on earth

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SnazzyShadeEmily
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They said I wasn't good enough for television. How do you like me now, voices in my head?
Sorry this took so long but better late than never

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Matt

Plot
It was a unique idea, but it felt like the actual story didn't start until basically the end of the script? I know you were trying to develop the characters, but imo it just felt a bit awkward. It really should be been paced better imo.

Did It Fit The Challenge
It did. You managed to use just the three characters in the yoga class setting. This was also the first script I read that had Sarah which was cool.

Dialogue
THIS is my main issue. A lot of your dialogue imo just felt forced and unnatural to me? It was mainly some of the attempts at jokes. It just felt really off and really could've been improved on.

How Effective Was Use Of Genre
Ik there was the whole murder mystery thing for a sec, but I'm assuming this is comedy? It wasn't horrible, but as I said it felt quite forced to me, and seemed a bit more eye rolling then funny.

Final Thoughts
I didn't hate this, but there were many issues. I really just feel like you could've done better, and based on other things I've read from you I know you can do better. I'm still excited for your other entries and hope to see you improve.

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Chris

Plot
Ghost stories have been done again and again, but I thought you amanaged to out a nice spin on things. The Elf backstory was very well done, and how you handled the whole ending was great.

Did It Fit The Challenge
I thought it fit te challenge very well. You managed to use the setting in a stand out way, and the three characters were well developed in their short time together.

Dialogue
It was very good and natural for the most part. My only complaint really is the Amiibo talk felt a bit forced (I C U AT UR OBSESSION THO).

How Effective Was The Use Of Genre
You managed to use the horror aspect VERY well. The build up with of The Elft was great and built up the suspense and the deaths were very brutal and kinda shocked me.

Final Thoughts
Overall I REALLY liked this. You took what could've been a generic idea and brought life into it. In a short amount of time you managed to have a great relationship between your characters, and have a strong beginning, middle, and end to your story. Very excited to see what else you bring to the table!

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Tye

Plot
I honestly REALLY loved the plot, and the twist actually surprised me (altho I knew something had to be up) and the ending was heart breaking.

Did It Fit The Challenge
Other then Zeb probably having a bit too big of a role for the challenge (although he fit the story really well) you managed to pull off the challenge very well with the three characters an setting!

Dialouge
Dialouge is definitely one of your strongest aspects. It all just feels so natural, and real. It was just really fun and easy to read.

How Effective Was The Use Of The Genre
As a drama, this worked VERY well. You managed to build up the story perfectly, and as I said before, the end result was actually hard hitting and effective.

Final Thoughts
I loved this. Your writing is just so well done, and you describe your scenes very well. This was also very different and unique then the other scripts, which was very good and brought more fresh air to the entries. I also know how much you stressed over this challenge, but the end result was honestly great

Megan - Grandma Linda's Adventure In Wal Mart

Plot -
It was just plain and simple, although still a ton of fun and a bit OTT, and I was very curious to see where it went.


Did it fit the challenge? -
Perfectly! All characters and the set were used well and in a great way. All the characters were very well written and just a joy to read. I feel blessed for creating queen Linda just because of this.

Dialogue -
I loved it! Very quick, witty, and fun to read. Had me laughing quite a few times as well.

How effective was the use of the genre?
The use of comedy was perfect, it fit the story, characters, and setting perfectly. Also, as I said before, managed to get a couple laughs out of me, which is always good for a comedy!

Final Thoughts: The moment I saw the title I KNEW I'd love this, and I was 100% right. This was simply a joy and a ton of fun to read! It truly makes me want to read more of your work, and I'm beyond excited for your other entries!

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Jack - A Very Bloody Christmas

Plot
Quite messy and rushed at times, although it had some good ideas. Some things felt a bit random (like the killers in general) and the pacing was quite off imo. The whole ending in general to me felt very rushed and sudden.

Did it fit the challenge?
It did, it used all three characters and the setting were used well.

Dialogue
Wasn't terrible, but quite a bit of it felt a bit forced, off, cheesy, or unnatural. It had a couple good lines though.

How effective was the use of the genre?
I'm guessing it was horror. For the most part it was done well, although as I me tioned before the serial killers DID feel random.

Final Thoughts - Not gonna lie, I did find this quite a bit messy but it wasn't terrible or anything! I did enjoy reading it. I just mainly think you should improve on your pacing of your script, and some of the dialoge to make it feel more natural. I'm still excited to read your other entries thiugh!

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Plot
Omg it was legit so wild. It kept taking so many twists and turns and I kept getting caught off guard so much. Was definitly a lot of fun to see how all the characters would end up.

Did it fit the challenge?
Yep! All three characters and the setting were used perfectly. I live for how much y'all are making Linda slay

Dialogue
It had me quite interested, and Teds speech was VERY well done and well written. A couple lines didn't flow as well as others, but I was still very impressed!

How effective was the use of the genre?
I'm guessing this was comedy? It kept kinda switching between dark comedy and slght horror for me (mainly when the shooting started omg) but I'm going with comedy. It didn't really make me laugh out loud, but the humor was still very well done and was fun to read.

Final Thoughts: This is the first thing I've read from you (other then your reviews) and it definitely makes me want to read more of your writing! As I said before, I loved all the turns the plot takes, and how you handled each of the characters. Very excited for your future entries!

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Vincent - Game Over, Sluts

Plot
HELP I WASNT EXPECTING SOMETHING LIKE THIS, IT WAS SO WILD! I LOVED how creative you got with it. My main issue was just how suddenly and kinda random it ended.

Did it fit the challenge?
Yep! The characters and setting was used well and VERY creatively.

Dialogue
It wasn't perfect, but it was fun to read. I wasn't ready for Tara to randomly go on those rants help.

How effective was the use of the genre?
I'm guessing this is.... Action? Which HELP I wasn't expecting someone to do it, ESPECALLY in the wal mart setting. But it was a lot of fun to read imo!

Final Thoughts: Knowing that you had some trouble getting this out in the end, I was rather impressed with it! As I said, I really liked how creative and different you went with the whole thing. Was just a lot of fun to read!

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NI-Gunners Untitled

Plot
Although it was very simple, I really enjoyed the story and it was very effective. The ending took a turn I didn't expect, but I still really liked it.

Did it fit the challenge?
You used the three characters very well, and I liked that the areas you picked and how you used them. The only reason I'm docking a couple points is you used a couple more areas then you should of, and some other characters got a bit too much focus.

Dialogue
It flowed really well, and felt very natural. Sarah's speech at the funeral was very well written imo.

How effective was the use of the genre?

This seemed a bit comedic and like a drama, and I think you handled both well. The funny elements (mainly from Linda) were fun, and from the ending I think you pulled off the dramatic aspect very well.

Final Thoughts: I've never read any of your writing before, but I really liked this! The characters all felt very real. I really enjoyed how Sarah developed, and I was actually sad when Linda died. As I said, my only real issue is you slightly bended the rules of the challenge. But other then that, the writing was very well done!

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John -
Plot
I thought it was quite an interesting plot, and I was curious to see where it would go. It also kinda surprised me a couple times near the end. I was a bit worried when I saw it was only ten pages that it would feel rushed. But it flowed pretty well IMO.

Did it fit the challenge?
I'd say you understood the challenge perfectly. You only used the three characters and stuck with the one setting. All was used in a rather unique way as well.

Dialogue
It wasn't horrible, but it was a tad bit rough at times, and a couple spelling mistakes kinda took me out of it. But it was still pretty good.

How effective was the use of the genre?

As a thriller/horror I thought it was handled decently and felt a bit unique.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed this! It was a good, quick, easy read. My main issue was probably that spelling mistakes, and the dialogue could use some improvements. But overall this was pretty well done!
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Cman710
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Thanks so much Tay. <3 I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as you did. And glad everyone did honestly. <3
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Zayday Williams
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OMG thank you Tay!!! U GOT IT u read it and understood it how I intended it! And omg round 2


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I really want this one. A lot of dialogue just ran through my head just looking at this
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OMG HELP THE PHOTOS AREN'T LOADING


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