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| Senpai | Jun 26 2015, 12:37 AM Post #1 |
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Hotel Username: .:Senpai:. Character Name: Xun Wayne Character Alias: The Crow Character Age: 18 Character Affiliation: Wayne Foundation, Bat Family Character Powers: ![]() Crow's Feathers, Crow Wing : [Sharp Throwing Blade]
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| Channy | Jun 26 2015, 03:22 AM Post #2 |
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Remove how you're Batman's adopted son. Remove some utilities, you'll gain more through developments. Your whole suit wont be bulletproof. Lower meter radius for the energy since you stated it's uncontrollable, and provide a heat temperature/force measurement. |
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| Senpai | Jun 26 2015, 04:03 AM Post #3 |
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1) Some utilities removed 2_Radius changed from 2-11 meters 3) Bullet-proofed Chest Plates Only for Stealth and Weight Reduction 4) Cape is used for protection against things such as explosions and burning buildings etc 5) Xun's adoption history has been edited 6-- Im not sure where to find heat and temperature information to suit this scenario, so I edited it out for a simpler explanation? If you'd like to provide information that'd also be great. Edited by Senpai, Jun 26 2015, 04:09 AM.
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| Melody | Jun 26 2015, 04:25 AM Post #4 |
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Beware the Black Cat!
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Explain more about your replicated fear gas, its not going to be something thats very powerful right off bat. You're going to have to develop that to have greater effects and durations . Also, either the suit is going to have to lose some major utilities or you're going to have to lock the Energy Projection for now and develop that later as well.
Edited by Melody, Jun 26 2015, 04:30 AM.
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| Senpai | Jun 26 2015, 05:05 AM Post #5 |
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Please point out which of the utilities are too much to start with. Also just noting that the blue print image is not used to describe the suit in words, as in written on the blue print but instead just as a design depiction. The energy projection was nerfed to begin with. I specifically noted it as a hidden capability, which I meant to imply that it almost never happens and when it does, happens at 2-11 meters in radius (which I will RP to be either significant or not depending on the appropriate context). It wasn't meant to be a full power, or combat move. It's more of a dangerous effect that happens when Xun's life is in immediate danger, as in death without an escape. I wanted it to be as random in danger as possible, being tiny flashes to larger booms depending on the severity of Xun's situation. The fear gas will also be nerfed, lasting only 1:30 seconds due to an incomplete formula and an anomaly created when Xun tries to recreate the compound on his own, which causes it to diffuse quickly over time and be filtered out of the body due to its low toxicity content, unlike the full formula. Would love to hear the Mod's opinion on this before I get to editing! Edited by Senpai, Jun 26 2015, 05:08 AM.
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| Channy | Jun 26 2015, 05:36 AM Post #6 |
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It seems fine, just know your fear gas wont drive others insane. I'll speak to some other staff members to see if you are qualified for Bat-Family. Also note that your gun wont house actual bullets unless on missions or during storyline scenes. Thx for cooperating xx
Edited by Channy, Jun 26 2015, 05:38 AM.
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| Senpai | Jun 26 2015, 12:52 PM Post #7 |
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Thanks! Yes, the fear gas is a downgraded, incomplete and improvised formula. It just provides low key hallucinations and typically is used for harsh interrogations or distracting more powerful enemies. I'm fine with using rubber bullets as well ^^ |
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| Melody | Jun 26 2015, 01:29 PM Post #8 |
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Beware the Black Cat!
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Looks good to me.![]() Dear <character name>, Bruce Wayne has formally invited you to attend his manor, on your next available evening, to support a new act of justice. It is advised you turn up with the utmost respect towards learning. Yours faithfully, Alfred T.C. Pennyworth. |
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| Senpai | Jun 26 2015, 02:31 PM Post #9 |
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Technicalities added for clearer scope of his ability: Technicalities [Training Towards Peak Human] Strength: 96 lbs. Durability: 96 lbs. Speed: 13 Mph Stamina: 20 Minutes Straight Feel free to correct me if this is over powered to begin with. EDIT: When can I get my badge request accepted? Edited by Senpai, Jun 26 2015, 02:39 PM.
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| Channy | Jun 26 2015, 07:04 PM Post #10 |
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Cut that out, this was accepted without it. If you want to keep those boosted you have to cut out things significantly. |
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