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Twister's Wacky Adventures!
Topic Started: Dec 3 2007, 09:36 AM (449 Views)
Twister Prower
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Issue 1: Introduction (part 1)

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Sorry about the quality... i forgot to put it in PNG

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DragonFlame
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Master of Dragons

Like yeah i have seen better quality but you take that up with humor. Good work there. Like to see more from you.
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Credit to sMy Pancakes


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Twister Prower
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i know the quality sucks n all, and i had more ideas but i can try harder
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LOL, Tails has a baby. :P
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Zippo Prower
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A pyrokinetic foxboy!

Um... should I critisize this as a forum member who always acts polite even when angered or should I be the comic critic I truly am?

Forum member: This is very good however there are some places you need improvement. You need a better looking style, maybe even a better story-line that doesn't break the 4th wall.

Comic Critic: SHOOT! I'm gonna waste a while on this one. First off, JPEG looks terrible. Second, this needs a story-line. It's highly cliche to have characters introduce the comic and acknowledge the author. (I myself do it but I'm cutting down) Second, get real backgrounds. Two-toned burns eyes. And is it just me, or is the door size changing? Please consider the advice given and you may just get a 5.


Phew. I think that helped. Although I mean no harm with my critisism. It can and will be better. Save as PNG when you go to save. Do not use spray-paint for those kind of effects. It does not help much... So keep trying!
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supertails07
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Zippo Prower
Dec 5 2007, 07:00 PM
Um... should I critisize this as a forum member who always acts polite even when angered or should I be the comic critic I truly am?

Forum member: This is very good however there are some places you need improvement. You need a better looking style, maybe even a better story-line that doesn't break the 4th wall.

Comic Critic: SHOOT! I'm gonna waste a while on this one. First off, JPEG looks terrible. Second, this needs a story-line. It's highly cliche to have characters introduce the comic and acknowledge the author. (I myself do it but I'm cutting down) Second, get real backgrounds. Two-toned burns eyes. And is it just me, or is the door size changing? Please consider the advice given and you may just get a 5.


Phew. I think that helped. Although I mean no harm with my critisism. It can and  will be better. Save as PNG when you go to save. Do not use spray-paint for those kind of effects. It does not help much... So keep trying!


Its only an intro, and he wasnt acknowledging ther author, he was refering to a CHARACTER, not the author. but yeah, its only an introduction, the main storyline hasnt begun yet. but yeah, the door is changing size, thats kinda wierd. and he said he FORGOT to change it to png, he didnt mean to make it jpeg. why do you care about the effects around the title and number. 4th wall breakage? read the title, key word: wacky.

and you said second twice.
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Zippo Prower
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A pyrokinetic foxboy!

supertails07
Dec 6 2007, 08:29 AM
Zippo Prower
Dec 5 2007, 07:00 PM
Um... should I critisize this as a forum member who always acts polite even when angered or should I be the comic critic I truly am?

Forum member: This is very good however there are some places you need improvement. You need a better looking style, maybe even a better story-line that doesn't break the 4th wall.

Comic Critic: SHOOT! I'm gonna waste a while on this one. First off, JPEG looks terrible. Second, this needs a story-line. It's highly cliche to have characters introduce the comic and acknowledge the author. (I myself do it but I'm cutting down) Second, get real backgrounds. Two-toned burns eyes. And is it just me, or is the door size changing? Please consider the advice given and you may just get a 5.


Phew. I think that helped. Although I mean no harm with my critisism. It can and  will be better. Save as PNG when you go to save. Do not use spray-paint for those kind of effects. It does not help much... So keep trying!


Its only an intro, and he wasnt acknowledging ther author, he was refering to a CHARACTER, not the author. but yeah, its only an introduction, the main storyline hasnt begun yet. but yeah, the door is changing size, thats kinda wierd. and he said he FORGOT to change it to png, he didnt mean to make it jpeg. why do you care about the effects around the title and number. 4th wall breakage? read the title, key word: wacky.

and you said second twice.

Trust me, when you make a comic, you're gonna meet a lot of critics and those critics look at every detail and usually take points off the rating for these things:

1) Generic introductions
2) Recolors
3) JPEG
4) No developing story
5) Bad look
6) Two-toned backgrounds
7) bad effects

and anything else I missed can be easily found on my comics while I was in my "n00b" stage of spriting. The world of comicing is harsh and cruel, but that is how it is.
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Twister Prower
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I already know this, I did a comic before you joined (i think) i had lots of critics annoying me about this so its an easy answer:

1ST ISSUE! LOTS MORE TO COME IN BETTER DETAIL WITH NEW CHARACTERS!
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Twister Prower
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ENJOY!
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supertails07
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Fleet Admiral Tails

alright, thats just wierd, the room is different in each frame.
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Galener
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Guardian of Lightning and Time

What you should do is make the background for the room and then just copy and paste it so that it is the same each time.

I can't really say much about that comic so far. I think if you work at it it could be really good. I also think if you put more detail into your background it might look better. For example put some darker colours into it so it's not a solid could and maybe put something on the walls and maybe something on the floor because it looks a bit blank.

Anyway I look forward to seeing more comics from you.
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Sunshine the hedgehog
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Cool comic, but I agree with GTFM.
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Twister Prower
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thanks i'll try it
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Zippo Prower
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A pyrokinetic foxboy!

Okay, number two is better, but the ever-changing room is still annoying. As well as badly drawn objects. Grammer still needs work.
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Twister Prower
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Heres Issue 3:

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Enjoy!
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