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| The Tails Doll Curse, His Perspective...; Warning Mild Language! | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Apr 13 2008, 12:32 PM (362 Views) | |
| Raku | Apr 13 2008, 12:32 PM Post #1 |
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*Note I do not believe in this curse, and I bet some of you never heard of it! XP *Note2 I will take this from the perspective of the Doll *Note3 I originally posted this on another board He sat there grinding his teeth, growing impatient, "Bah! When is some sucker going to some Sonic R! I am growing bored, angry and hungry!" The song Can you feel the sunshine? began to play in the background. The evil doll smirked as he pulled out his blade, "Haha! Some sucker is actually playing my game. The Fool!" The evil doll lifted up his blade and swiped it into the air. A loud boom sound filled the room and a portal full of pure evil energy began to form. "Here I come sucker!" The doll took a jump into the portal. "Zack I don't feel right playing this game!" She sighed as she brushed her blond hair behind here shoulder. "Heh, that is because you are losing to me sis!" Zack smirked as he beat his sister for the 100th time. "Not that Zack! What about the curse of the Tails Doll!" She shouted. "SHUT UP VAL! It Is Just Some Stupid Internet Hoax!" Zack shouted in rage as he threw his ps2 controller down into the ground. "Zack! Please!" Valerie pleaded with her brother. "Oh My God! Would you just Shut Up!" Suddenly the tv flashed a red image with the picture of Tails Doll. "ZACK!" Val screamed in horror as she ran to the door. "Oh for crying out loud Val! It is all in your head!" Zack grabbed Valerie by her ankles making her fall flat on her face. "Oh I love fast food!" A voice exclaimed from the TV. "See Zack I wasn't lying!" Valerie shrieked as a figure climbed out of the TV. "Okay, so maybe it isn't an internet hoax..." Zack reached for his baseball bat. "Hey! I don't like it when my food tries to fight back!" The cursed doll jumped up on top of Zack and slashed him with his blade. "Zack!" Val shrieked. "He is mine now Blondie!" The cursed doll grew in size, two times bigger than Zack! "No Please! Leave us alone!" Val screamed as she reached for her brother. But ti was too late the doll devoured his body. "Poop!" Valerie cried out, she ran for the window and tried to open it, but it was locked. "Come on Valerie... You're next! You can't run!" The Cursed came at her. "Never!" Val did a back flip and kicked the window out. "I took Karate and I am a black belt!" She panicked." Oh come on Valerie! You are mine!" Valerie proceeded to do a back flip out the window. "Dang YOU!" The cursed doll shouted out the window. Valerie ran for the car, "Where are they..." She began to dig into her pocket, she dug deeper and deeper, "Ah Here they are!" She exclaimed and pulled out a key to the car, she tried to open the door but it was locked. "No Time!" She punched out the glass and jumped inside. "Valerie!" The cursed doll jumped out the window. "Dang!" She turned on the car and sped down the road. "Poop! One got away, but she will be cursed for life, she will see me for the rest of her life, until she kills herself! Then I shall have her soul for eternity!" The Tails Doll cackled evilly as he lifted his blade into the air and made another portal and returned home. FINISHED! A couple times I was putting Sally instead of Valerie or Val lol xD. Also yes the Doll was correct, she saw the doll where ever she went, she now lives in a mental ward 20 minutes from her home. This is not real of coarse, but what do I know I never played any of the Sonic R games. Edit, I did not use the 'f' word at all but apparently Dang is a bad word and so is poop >_< |
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| Shianne-Kitty | Apr 13 2008, 01:00 PM Post #2 |
Howling in the shadows...
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This was pretty good.And funny too! xD |
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| Raku | Apr 13 2008, 01:20 PM Post #3 |
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Thank you! =) I really don't like the curse nor believe in it, but I had no idea what to right, so I wrote this. |
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| Sonic the Hedgehog | Apr 13 2008, 04:25 PM Post #4 |
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Assasination
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Ditto. Kind of random though. |
   Gravity distorts the fabric of Spacetime. -------- Hare Hare Yukai Dance. ^^ ------ A particle Quantum Tunneling a potential barrier We know that, without time, there can be no change. Time cannot "exist" on its own - it is an essential property of space - so we must conclude for something to be here there must always have been something. Time is not a property of "nothing" (how could it be?) so 'something' must have existed (including space) for the universe to have been 'created' from. It would seem infinite regression indeed exists. | |
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| Raku | Apr 14 2008, 01:46 PM Post #5 |
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Wait, how is it random? |
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| Speed-X | Apr 17 2008, 01:33 PM Post #6 |
Amazing how I'm still changing in outwards behavior.
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ORLY?!? SO U TINK WE NEVAH HERD OF IT HUH?!?!? XD Really, though, I'm sure the majority of us HAVE actually heard of it... there's been like, five Tails Doll Curse topics in the "Other Character Discussion" forum in the past... but they've all gotten locked. T_T I personally LOVE the Tail Doll Curse and the Tails Doll... the evilness and gore... so beautiful. ='] *slapp'd* Anyways... this actually looks like it being taken in the perspective of the narrator, not the Tails Doll (forgot what that was called... I think it was second... or third- person view.) ^^; It has quite a few grammatical errors, most of those being capitalization errors, but otherwise it's actually pretty good. Keep this up, I expect to see more of this from you in the future. ^_~ However, I'd consider using consonants more (it's, they're, etc.) instead of saying them as their actual two original words... it'd sound more modern and more pleasing to read that way. Of course... that's all up to you. It just depends on the personality of the character(s). The majority of different characters WILL speak with consonants (I'd say about 98% of them... of course, I may be exaggerating a bit), but there are the few characters that are more "formal" than others. Take Rock Lee from Naruto for instance... he'll never speak with consonants, and... for gawd's sake, it can get SOOOOO annoying at times.... >.<;; *brick'd* Just think of the dialouge of the character(s); THINK like the characters. However... when it comes to the narration of the story, depending on the perspective (this is mostly for if it's being told by a narrator), some consonants are actually a tad irregular to use; mostly ones such as "that're" (that are) and such. And NEVER be afraid to let someone proofread your work. ^^; That's all. Hope I helped out~ ^-^ |
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| Raku | Apr 17 2008, 01:56 PM Post #7 |
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Like I said I originally posted this on another forum. Also yeah I just re read I did it like this "I Am So Happy!" to show that they are yelling. Instead of going "I AM SO HAPPY!" or by taking this route "I am so happy!" He yelled angerly as he swiped at the kid. |
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| Speed-X | Apr 17 2008, 02:35 PM Post #8 |
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Amazing how I'm still changing in outwards behavior.
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You actually could've just saed, after the end of the quote, something like "She excalimed" or "He cheered" and so on. Yes, I get where you're comin' from there, but in reality is would be counted as a grammatical error. But, like I said, I understand what you mean.... |
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| DiRosso | Apr 19 2008, 10:34 AM Post #9 |
You won't hear this boy complaining
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A little bit of advice.... whenever you start a quote, it's good to start a new paragraph. It makes it more neat and less confusing. ^^ |
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