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The Sting - PROLOGUE; It's another serious try...
Topic Started: 4 Jul 2008, 04:41 AM (124 Views)
SIN2	4 Jul 2008, 04:41 AM Post #1
"... most wanted and most hated..." Posts: 1,167 Group: Members Member #370 Joined: 7 June 2008	Read Reply Rate Rawr Rocket



ErikKiller	4 Jul 2008, 05:13 AM Post #2
Sleekier or vomiter Posts: 2,243 Group: Members Member #196 Joined: 10 May 2008 Steam ID 456123789258	Hmm... lemme see... Info is without a 's'. Same for information. Without a 's'. And thump is with a 'p' not 'b'. The smoke looked kinda off and the dying dudes posing was kinda off. I could whine about some quality and camera placement but I wont. And pretty good for a prologue, I didn't understand ANYTHING.



Mythos	4 Jul 2008, 06:31 AM Post #3
PhD. Posts: 3,715 Group: Admin Member #2 Joined: 22 December 2007 Steam ID MithosAurion	Hm, I dunno. HL2 comics are hard to evaluate these days from a simple prologue, because it's such an overused setting. But so far, except the grammar mistakes Erik pointed, everything seems fine.
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tomxtomato	4 Jul 2008, 07:43 AM Post #4
My name iiiiis Posts: 202 Group: Members Member #424 Joined: 11 June 2008	I didn't really like the gradients used in the text boxes or speech bubbles. Interesting idea I suppose, but a traitor supplying the enemy with info, then being shot... where have I seen this used? oh yea, everywhere. The narration was a bit bland, but the editing was ok and if the story gets some sort of twist this could turn out well.



SIN2	4 Jul 2008, 08:31 AM Post #5
"... most wanted and most hated..." Posts: 1,167 Group: Members Member #370 Joined: 7 June 2008	Well that with the gradient was actually a help for you... the traitor got shot by "The Sting" thats why the speechbubble at the end was blue Edited by SIN2, 4 Jul 2008, 08:31 AM.



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