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| la-vida-loca | Mar 25 2008, 11:07 PM Post #1 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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okay, so i put up a story under my strongbox, but the rules say i gotta type up a teaser. so i don't know how long it is but hopefully it's long enough. Present: The first shot shattered the back window of Crz6's Cargo car. The second missed, barely. Crz6 ducked as a third hit the armor of the Cargo car. "Permission to evade?" asked the car, buzzing to life. "Permission granted!" Crz6 shouted, trying to squeeze himself as far into the small foot space as possible. The tires screeched as the Cargo car sped up, turning sharply to avoid another attack. Its defense and attack systems kicked in. Crz6 could hear the metal clanging as the Cargo's Shart guns unfolded themselves from their concealed hiding places, loading themselves quickly. Crz6 hurriedly tore at the sleek mats that concealed the wires and so many other things from the driver of the vehicle. He pulled feverishly, to no avail. The mats were too well attached. He cursed under his breath, frantically searching for another way in as the Cargo car swerved again. A loud, metallic bang erupted to his left. The car had been hit again. The armor was a strong one. It was around the entire car, usually. It was activated when the car sensed danger, almost like the primitive cloaking shields that had been used in the former years. It surrounded the inside of the car as well. Crz6's head snapped up as he realized what he had to do. It would be suicide, but it was his only chance for survival. He bit his lip as the car swerved again, its own guns firing now as well. He could taste the tang of his own blood as he bit harder. He would have to do it soon, but it would need to be at the right time, when the enemy car was reloading. That would never happen, he realized to his dismay. The Cargo who was against him had to be on the side of the Crusaders, which meant endless supply of ammunition. The Cargo swerved again, and Crz6 hit his head. He took in a deep breath. He was crazy. "Armor Off." he told the car. The Car responded immediately, its armor disabling quickly. Crz6 dug his fingernails into the shiny metallic floor, prying at it. Bullets effortlessly pierced the metal of the now un-protected Cargo car. The computer buzzed loudly in warning, what sounded like hundreds of computer voices raising the alarm as more and more things in the car failed. The Cargo swerved, dodging as many hits as it could. It's gravity defiers booted up as a tire was taken out, and then another, the sounds of open fire drowning Crz6 in his own panic. Finally, the floor gave way, revealing thousands of wires and inner workings. Some of the wires, where Crz6 had fixed it, were different colors. A bright red was connected to a delicate green colored wire, while the other piece of the same red wire was now connected to a brown one. Crz6 searched frantically for the right two colors. He had wired the vehicle to have an Emergency evacuation system, but he needed to set it off first. A bullet narrowly missed his hand as it sailed through the car. Another screeched passed his ear. He felt panic rising in him, like the bile that was rising in his throat. If he did not succeed at finding the right wire, he would die. The computer screens above him shattered, the glass raining down on him. Crz6 looked up to take in the damage as another round of fire tore through the side of the car. He did not see the wire anywhere in the tangled chaos of wires. An explosion right next to him made Crz6 look in time to see a flash of red. His enemies were now launching explosives. Bullets were being fired again. Panic seized him, and he plunged his hands deep into the mess. His frantic fingers found a wire, and pulled. The Cargo car gave a jolt of opposition, running itself out of its dodging course. Crz6's fingers found another wire, and pulled. And then another, and pulled again. As the wires snapped, what was left of the car began failing. Another pull, another wire. He yanked, and the Cargo car dipped dangerously to the left, its unarmored metal scratching against the highway's rough pavement. He pulled another, and another, panicking, until he grabbed as many wires as his hands would allow, and with one burst of strength from his failing muscles, yanked the wires loose. The Cargo car whined loudly, as though it realized what was going on. And then Crz6 saw it. A fine silver wire, dangerously close to the pavement that sped by below him. Without a second thought, his trembling hand reached down, just as the Cargo banked forward, its systems whining loudly, losing control of the vehicle. In desperation, Crz6 reached down and grabbed the silver wire, feeling the heat of the Gravity Defiers and the friction of the road inches from his knuckles, and tugged. so, hopefully ya liked the snippet, if you wanna read more i hope you have access to my strongbox cause if you don't than this is all you're getting! see ya soon! ^.^ Comment Thread: http://s15.zetaboards.com/xwritersdreamx/topic/6503031/ |
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| LionHeart | Mar 26 2008, 02:02 AM Post #2 |
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looks great so far, well done! |
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| la-vida-loca | Mar 27 2008, 07:14 PM Post #3 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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thanx LionHeart! glad you liked it!
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| LionHeart | Mar 28 2008, 03:15 AM Post #4 |
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| la-vida-loca | Mar 29 2008, 02:53 AM Post #5 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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so ben got everyone who asked for it access to my strongbox, if you wanna check out some more of this story. ^.^ |
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| LionHeart | Mar 29 2008, 03:48 AM Post #6 |
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will do |
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