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| DayDreamer | Jan 18 2008, 03:22 AM Post #1 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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OHH....C'est Tres...ummm..yeah it's very interesting...I want to read more, these seem like very interesting characters, and very possible BTW, you shouldn't ever apoligize for a piece of work that came from within your head, if people don't like personal stories they will get over it, whatever is easier for you to write, makes the story so much more fun to read!
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| DayDreamer | Feb 12 2008, 10:19 PM Post #2 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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aww it just keeps getting cuter and cuter...it's so great, and wow..it's just an amazing story, i really really love it.. |
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| Riss | Feb 15 2008, 01:07 AM Post #3 |
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Thanks.... Although, seeing as it's so personal, it's hard to write this story when I'm mad at the person this is about... "Andrew"... And so I might not be getting anything done for awhile. |
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| DayDreamer | Feb 18 2008, 10:23 PM Post #4 |
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oh..that's to bad...hopefully the anger will subside, and you will be able to forgive him for whatever he did..unless it was totally awful of course.. |
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| Riss | Feb 24 2008, 02:58 AM Post #5 |
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No... Nothing awful. I'm working on my story now, I'm just not getting so into it, like I usually can. He's been having mood swings lately. :\ Anyways. I dunno if anybody wanted this, but I've got pictures of some of the people my characters are based off of. Melody. Chloe. Elyzabeth. Charlie. Andrew. Andrew Campel. (I haven't posted the part(s) with him in it yet.) |
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| Esaul | Feb 24 2008, 06:22 AM Post #6 |
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That was awkward and a bit out of place... Reading the prologue and getting into the first few paragraphs I realized it doesn't make sense at all... also with Andrew being there that's rather random and unusual, especially so early in the story. finally you are either missing words here and there or used the wrong form. |
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| Riss | Feb 24 2008, 06:28 AM Post #7 |
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Yep. The prologue: is not the beginning of the story, like it probably seems. But it's part of the story... I dunno how else to explain it. And that line isn't really out of place- I did edit that bit earlier today though... It's meaning that I don't have time to do anything special... But that whole part got taken out so yeah... And I know, I have a LOT or grammer and spelling errors. |
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| Esaul | Feb 24 2008, 06:31 AM Post #8 |
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when i get time i will go through and see what i can do for editing if you want |
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| Riss | Feb 24 2008, 06:34 AM Post #9 |
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Okay.
Maybe you'll find something I haven't. (More than likely, actually). Thanks. Edit: Actually... You should wait until I post my edited version of the story. |
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| DayDreamer | Feb 25 2008, 12:54 AM Post #10 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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hmm...i was to wrapped up in the story to notice anything, and when i did i just guessed what you really meant lol |
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| Esaul | Feb 25 2008, 05:03 AM Post #11 |
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I'm sorry but I'm really disgusted with the story, though it isn't your fault. It isn't your writing at all, it is wonderful. I'm enjoying it a lot. It's just the age bothers me since I love the law and what not. STATUTORY RAPE AHHH! xD |
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| Riss | Feb 25 2008, 05:34 AM Post #12 |
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Oh pfft. It's not rape... Nobody's having sex. oO |
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| Esaul | Feb 25 2008, 05:40 AM Post #13 |
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still is wrong for a minor and an adult xD |
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| Riss | Feb 25 2008, 05:54 AM Post #14 |
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*shrugs* I guess.. if you love somebody enough... you wouldn't really think twice about it... |
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| DayDreamer | Feb 27 2008, 11:47 PM Post #15 |
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i really like it Riss, and if the whole age thing actually mattered half of our parents wouldn't be together..you wanna hear illegal, my mother was sixteen when she was pregnant for my older brother..my dad if five years older......ANYWAY..keep the story coming..it's lovely |
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