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| Silence; i'm bad at poems, don't laugh | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Dec 16 2007, 01:37 AM (126 Views) | |
| DayDreamer | Dec 16 2007, 01:37 AM Post #1 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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Free verse, i can't rhyme(sp?). this poem, unlike some i've written, has no truth in my life at all Silence The tension grows, un said words echo in my head I fell that same cold as it closes in There is so much I want to say I can not find the words, just one chance The silence leaks into my sould An awkward pause, a heart felt sigh Everything will change with just one moment Then all we'll have is... Silence |
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| Esaul | Dec 16 2007, 03:40 AM Post #2 |
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You warned me it was crappy. I'm disappinted now. It wasn't crappy at all. I really liked it. You should also share a few of your poems from you project last year in Bile's class. |
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| la-vida-loca | Dec 16 2007, 01:59 PM Post #3 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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a few spelling errors, but i liked it also.
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| DayDreamer | Dec 16 2007, 07:52 PM Post #4 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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I was thinking of sharing some of them..you spelt byles wrong silly will.
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| Naruto91 | Dec 16 2007, 10:39 PM Post #5 |
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Will is such a silly person!
I liked it too, even though I don't like poems that don't rhyme, this one still flowed despite that. Good job, and la-vida-loca is right. I few small spelling fixes and it will be perfect. Like sould, it should be soul, right? Great job! Naruto91
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| Esaul | Dec 17 2007, 01:05 AM Post #6 |
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oh dammit. what you get for me not thinking chris that's really a dumb remark. Poem's don't have to rhyme to be considered poems. |
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| DayDreamer | Dec 27 2007, 12:23 AM Post #7 |
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yeah i love jonas brothers..got a problem
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Besides Chris I already mentioned that I can't rhyme...tsk tsk..and i can't spell either so HAHAHA and LALALA...I don't even care that I can't spell so there
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