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Wishful Thinking; it was just a dream.
Topic Started: Dec 17 2007, 02:15 AM (200 Views)
Riss
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Where we gonna go from here?
My fingers comb through my hair,
I crack my knuckles with thought.
I concentrate on the task ahead,
I think about the strain this has brought.

I lean over the edge,
Take one long, deep, breath.
I stretch my hands high over my head.
Is the only answer, truly… death?

I fall back onto the street,
I cry and I pull my hair tight.
The tension’s getting to me,
My hearts beats faster, full of fright.

What about my family?
What if they really do care?
My friends tried to help me,
They told me that I’d better not dare.

I lie on the pavement,
The solutions just at my feet.
I stare up at the sky, close my eyes,
And simply wait to die in the street.

And then the light doesn’t come,
All is as it should seem.
I think I am dead, but then I see…
It was just another wishful dream.
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la-vida-loca
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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I lie on the pavement,
The solutions just at my feet.
I stare up at the sky, close my eyes,
And simply wait to die in the street.


wow, riss. i absolutely love these lines! they are totally amazing! beautiful, really. awesome poem. :)
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Esaul
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It was okay, not your best of works I have to admit. the last verse was awesome though.
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Riss
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Where we gonna go from here?
^-^
Thank you.
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CalmB4TheStorm
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I have never read something that could make suicide appealing
you went beyond that
you made it beautiful



im not so sure that's a good thing
but it does show the power of this poem
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Esaul
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erm...that isn't supposed to be a good thing. since when is suicide, taking of ones life a good thing?
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CalmB4TheStorm
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It's a good thing in terms of the power her poem had
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