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Topic Started: Jan 17 2008, 03:14 AM (161 Views)
Riss
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Where we gonna go from here?
I was going to call it "I Miss You," but I believe I already have a poem posted with that title.
Anyways.
I wrote this for school..::
(I don't really like the 4th stanza)


I miss your voice,
I miss your laugh,
I made a bad choice…
I miss you.

I wish that you’d still love me.
Did you ever, though?
Was this what was meant to be?
I miss you.

I miss the warm fuzzy feelings.
The soft, “I love you, goodnight”s.
That’s my heart you’re stealing…
I miss you.

Why do I care?
This is a fake smile…
That I’m forced to wear.
I miss you.

But all has been said and done.
I love you but…
It’s obvious that I’m not the one.
I miss you…
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la-vida-loca
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
it's good, but the "i miss you" 's don't really fit until the last stanza, imo.
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Riss
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Where we gonna go from here?
Yeah I had to have it like that for school.
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la-vida-loca
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
i figured as much. :)
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Esaul
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personally i think it fits. good work.
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CalmB4TheStorm
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I love it
Excellent work

:nod:
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