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| Riss | Jan 17 2008, 03:14 AM Post #1 |
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Where we gonna go from here?
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I was going to call it "I Miss You," but I believe I already have a poem posted with that title. Anyways. I wrote this for school..:: (I don't really like the 4th stanza) I miss your voice, I miss your laugh, I made a bad choice… I miss you. I wish that you’d still love me. Did you ever, though? Was this what was meant to be? I miss you. I miss the warm fuzzy feelings. The soft, “I love you, goodnight”s. That’s my heart you’re stealing… I miss you. Why do I care? This is a fake smile… That I’m forced to wear. I miss you. But all has been said and done. I love you but… It’s obvious that I’m not the one. I miss you… |
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| la-vida-loca | Jan 18 2008, 02:15 AM Post #2 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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it's good, but the "i miss you" 's don't really fit until the last stanza, imo. |
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| Riss | Jan 18 2008, 07:09 PM Post #3 |
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Yeah I had to have it like that for school. |
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| la-vida-loca | Jan 18 2008, 08:25 PM Post #4 |
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Sometimes I think I was born backwards...
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i figured as much.
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| Esaul | Jan 26 2008, 10:50 AM Post #5 |
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personally i think it fits. good work. |
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| CalmB4TheStorm | Jan 26 2008, 07:27 PM Post #6 |
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I love it Excellent work
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