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Nobility among us
Topic Started: Nov 29 2007, 09:28 PM (826 Views)
Ben Zwycky
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Thank you and welcome, STAL :D

I'm not sure how much more explicit I could be in the prologue that this is in a world of modern technology without it all sounding forced, there are at least seven indications that this is an industrialized society before the first line of dialogue is even spoken:

An abandoned factory
Urban twilight/ streetlight
Storage tanks
(with walkways, hatchways and large-diameter pipes)
A torch
A concrete corridor
A metal door (ok, not so much, I could make it a riveted steel door to make it more obvious)
A plastic bag (those things have only been around since the 1950s)

I find this a very difficult story to categorise, it doesn't really fit neatly into any one genre, but still flows nicely IMO (your opinions may vary, and that perspective is valuable to me)

The events in the prologue and chapter one are mainly establishing the setting and context for the rest of the story, the underground movement and political tension between the people and nobility do come to the fore at a later point, but are not the main focus.

I've now given you access to my strongbox, where I'll be putting up a newer version of chapter 1 tomorrow in response to OBP's feedback. Take a look at that and the appendix ('Gandria') thread to give you a feel for the overall setting, and if you could let me know how often I should expect to hear from you (1 chapter each week?) that would help avoid unnecessary pestering :D
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SirThinkALot

I should be able to do a chapter a week, but not next week because I'v got midterms and am gonna be gone on that weekend.

I do in fact like the concept, and I'm eager to see where it goes. ANd I think it does flow well once you get into it, but It just took me longer to get into it than I should have, which might not seem like a bad thing, but its a HORRIBLE thing if you want to get it published.

I think in this case it might not be a bad idea to force the setting upon the reader in the prologue at least. Although I can certainly understand your concern abotu that.

Anywho I'll take a look at the strongbox probably tonight or tommrow.
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Ben Zwycky
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OK, just updated this to the latest version of the Prologue and Chapter 1, but you still need access to my strongbox to read any further ;)
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